"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to improve Hopewell's economy—and generate additional tax revenues—is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
The author of the arguments claims that the Hopewell's economy could be augmented by building a golf course and resort hotel similar to the nearby town Ocean view. To support his claims, author says that in the past two year, tourism in Ocean view has increased and new businesses opened, its tax revenues has risen by 30 percent. However, author argument's conclusion is based on erroneous logic and comparision. Hence argument is flawed, to support these, several reasonings are provided below.
First of all, how can the author relate the condtion of two adjacant towns Hopewell and Ocean View. Ocean view has built golf course and resort hotels but from which basis author says that the same resorts and golf course would boom the economy of hopewell also. It could be possible that, Hopewell maximum population are not rich, and there maximum population prefer to live in their homes and there is no tourist spot. Also if Hopewell's population do not play golf rather they play cricket or anyother sports then the author's conclusion is flawed. If Hopwell's population is not rich and they prefer to live in their home then what would use of resort hotel condition there is also no attracting toursit spot.
Secondly, author say that in the past two years, tourism in Ocean view has increased but what was before this. It could be possible that tourism in Ocean view has not increased because of municipal gold course and resort hotel insteat there are other reasons. Author also not mentioned the how much tourism has increased, from 1000 members to 1010 members is also an increase and 1000-2000 is also an increase.
Thirdly, author has not mentioned the sufficient evidence that the risen in tax revenue by 30 percent is mainly because of new gold course and resorts. It could be possible that the reason for rise economy is not the above insteast people are more aware for tax rules and regulation and they want development in the town hence they are paying full taxes which were not paying earlier.
Author has compared the economical development for two towns is same without menitoning about the condition in both town. Any development which is good for a town could not be good for others. And, author also not mentioned the sufficient evidence to support the economy development in the Ocean view depends only on resort hotels and golf course.
In summar, arguments fall shirts in many aspects. The author did start with a sound premise but he failed to support his conclusion logically. If he had mentioned the factors in wwhich both tows's ecoonmoy depends then author's though process in progressing from the premise to stated conclusion would not have been so abrupt and jarring. Further the inclusion of more data related to related of economy and development of resorts and gold course would have helped author to drive his position in a far convincing way. But, in the absence of these, the argument is flawed.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: However, author argument's conclusion is based on erroneous logic and comparision.
Error: comparision Suggestion: comparison
Sentence: First of all, how can the author relate the condtion of two adjacant towns Hopewell and Ocean View.
Error: condtion Suggestion: condition
Error: adjacant Suggestion: adjacent
Sentence: Ocean view has built golf course and resort hotels but from which basis author says that the same resorts and golf course would boom the economy of hopewell also.
Error: hopewell Suggestion: hopeless
Sentence: Also if Hopewell's population do not play golf rather they play cricket or anyother sports then the author's conclusion is flawed.
Error: anyother Suggestion: another
Sentence: If Hopwell's population is not rich and they prefer to live in their home then what would use of resort hotel condition there is also no attracting toursit spot.
Error: toursit Suggestion: tourist
Sentence: Secondly, author say that in the past two years, tourism in Ocean view has increased but what was before this.
Error: tourism Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: It could be possible that tourism in Ocean view has not increased because of municipal gold course and resort hotel insteat there are other reasons.
Error: insteat Suggestion: instead
Error: tourism Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Author also not mentioned the how much tourism has increased, from 1000 members to 1010 members is also an increase and 1000-2000 is also an increase.
Error: tourism Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: It could be possible that the reason for rise economy is not the above insteast people are more aware for tax rules and regulation and they want development in the town hence they are paying full taxes which were not paying earlier.
Error: insteast Suggestion: instant
Sentence: Author has compared the economical development for two towns is same without menitoning about the condition in both town.
Error: menitoning Suggestion: mentioning
Sentence: In summar, arguments fall shirts in many aspects.
Error: summar Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: If he had mentioned the factors in wwhich both tows's ecoonmoy depends then author's though process in progressing from the premise to stated conclusion would not have been so abrupt and jarring.
Error: ecoonmoy Suggestion: economy
Error: wwhich Suggestion: which
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 499 350
No. of Characters: 2390 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.726 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.79 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.362 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.682 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.352 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.555 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 413, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...sed on erroneous logic and comparision. Hence argument is flawed, to support these, s...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...urse would boom the economy of hopewell also. It could be possible that, Hopewell ma...
^^^^
Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ssible that, Hopewell maximum population are not rich, and there maximum populati...
^^
Line 3, column 423, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...eir homes and there is no tourist spot. Also if Hopewells population do not play gol...
^^^^
Line 3, column 522, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...lay cricket or anyother sports then the authors conclusion is flawed. If Hopwells popul...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 287, Rule ID: THE_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'how'?
Suggestion: how
...ther reasons. Author also not mentioned the how much tourism has increased, from 1000 ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 332, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ow much tourism has increased, from 1000 members to 1010 members is also an incre...
^^
Line 9, column 25, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...ng earlier. Author has compared the economical development for two towns is same witho...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 11.1786427146 197% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2452.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 499.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91382765531 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3866364091 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436873747495 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 745.2 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3154161009 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.454545455 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6818181818 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311457161166 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994005697237 0.0743258471296 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113907888505 0.0701772020484 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169676909613 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0903158368089 0.0628817314937 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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