An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The author of the argument claims that, the government of Tagus should promote farming of this new type of millet. To support his claims author says that an International organization has made a new breed of millet which is high in vitamin A. As this millet breed cost more, hence farmers would be provided subsidies for it. People of Tagus readily adopting it since millet is staple food in Tagus. The author did provided some sounded premises to claim his argument. However, author's line of reasoning if fraught with erroneous logic and conclusions.
Firstly, author says that, in response of vitamin A deficiency among people of Tagus, organization has engineered this new breed. Author has assumed that there are majority of Tagus population have vitamin A deficiency but it is possible that it is not the case. There are no information mentioned about how much percentage of total population having this Vitamin A deficiency problem. It may be the case that, only 10 out of 10000 people have this issue, then there is no need to promote this type of millet farming.
Secondly, author has assumed that this new engineered millet is rich in vitamin A but in the argument nothing is mentioned about how much rich and what the definition of rich according to the author or development organization. It could be possible that they are considering 10mg vitamin A per 1kg millet food as a vitamin A rich food whereas in Tagus there are several food that have more vitamin A comparing to this food, Then there is no need to focus for promoting this thing.
Thirdly, author says that this breed will cost more to the farmers and subsidies would be provided to farmers to promote this breed. Although, it is a nice initiative but it would be illogical to support this view, unless the exact or relative cost of seeds and providing subsidies are not mentioned. It could be possible that the cost of seeds are $200 and government is providing only $2 as subsidy. In addition to this, although millet is a staple food among Tagus people but what about the production of food from this new breed seed. There is nothing mentioned about the production. It might be possible that the production of crops from this new type of seed is substantially low then this case, farmers will not go for this crops, as they are poor they need profit making crops.
In summary, the argument falls short in many aspects. The author did start with a sound premise but it did not provide sufficient support to strengthen his argument. If the author had provided more data about the percentage of population having vitamin A problems, what level of deficiency they have then the author's thought process in progressing from the premise to the stated conclusion would not have been so abrupt and jarring. Further, the inclusion of data about cost and subsidies of seeds, production of crops from this seeds would have helped author to drive his point in a far convincing way and established his position. But, in the absence of these, the argument remains flawed.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 524 350
No. of Characters: 2461 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.784 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.697 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.514 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.496 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.682 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 415, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
...is staple food in Tagus. The author did provided some sounded premises to claim his argu...
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Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'majorities'?
Suggestion: majorities
...reed. Author has assumed that there are majority of Tagus population have vitamin A defi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 81, Rule ID: A_BUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a bit'?
Suggestion: A bit
...ew engineered millet is rich in vitamin A but in the argument nothing is mentioned ab...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 363, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun food seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some food'.
Suggestion: some food
... A rich food whereas in Tagus there are several food that have more vitamin A comparing to t...
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Line 6, column 482, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...need to focus for promoting this thing. Thirdly, author says that this breed wil...
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Line 8, column 385, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... are 00 and government is providing only as subsidy. In addition to this, althoug...
^^
Line 8, column 723, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...then this case, farmers will not go for this crops, as they are poor they need profi...
^^^^
Line 11, column 254, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A problem' or simply 'problems'?
Suggestion: A problem; Problems
...percentage of population having vitamin A problems, what level of deficiency they have the...
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Line 11, column 525, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...dies of seeds, production of crops from this seeds would have helped author to drive...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, whereas, in addition, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 28.8173652695 177% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2521.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 523.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82026768642 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56954923531 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.390057361377 0.468620217663 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 775.8 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7323920199 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.608695652 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7391304348 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30434782609 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414294842696 0.218282227539 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129113089314 0.0743258471296 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105288755797 0.0701772020484 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255082128606 0.128457276422 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102588565097 0.0628817314937 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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