The argument claims that the increase in the number of vandalism in Carlton County is because of the increased immigrants and if we reduce the number of out-of-state immigrants the vandalism will also decrease. Stated in this way the argument manipulates thoughts and coveys distorted view of the situation. It also fails to answer various questions which need to be answered for making a proper conclusion.
Firstly, the question which needs to be addressed is why is there an increase in vandalism? Is it because of some political issue like an increase in taxes, unemployment, etc.? If this is the case then the immigrants do not have a direct relation to the increase in vandalism.
The political status of the county must be checked and then the reason should be found out. Here the author just assumes that as the number of immigrants has increased then they are responsible for the vandalism. The argument would have been much clearer if it explicitly stated that the immigrants are causing chaos.
Secondly, the author states that vandalism has increased over the past two years and the number of immigrants has increased. Since the exact number of years are stated here, we cannot firmly accept this belief. If the increase is very little change like if it has increased by one percent then it makes no sense to blame the immigrants for vandalism.
Lastly, the author states that if we reduce the number of out-of-state immigrants then the vandalism will stop. What is the proof that this will happen? It might also be a case where the vandalism still increases. If the argument would have provided evidence that it will decrease the number of vandalism then the argument would have been a lot more convincing.
Hence, as it is evident from the aforementioned analysis the claims put forward but the author has not been fortified with relevant feedback, statistics, and comparative data. Thus, it fails to convince the reader.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 326 350
No. of Characters: 1576 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.249 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.834 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.613 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.54 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.596 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... increase in taxes, unemployment, etc.? If this is the case then the immigrants do...
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Line 9, column 215, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...se where the vandalism still increases. If the argument would have provided eviden...
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Line 9, column 231, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had provided'?
Suggestion: had provided
...dalism still increases. If the argument would have provided evidence that it will decrease the numb...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 326.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98466257669 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69803542597 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460122699387 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8752188128 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2777777778 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163230689163 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489704612517 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806577824854 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0811619049884 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713347676723 0.0628817314937 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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