According to the author's conclusion, illegal immigrants are a serious threat to the economy and national identity and there must be some legal laws for forbidding them from entering the country. The author suggests that this can be done by strengthening the borders. But there are several loopholes in the claims made by the editor of the newspaper. Let's shine some light on them.
First and foremost, the author assumes that the economy is only affected by outsiders or immigrants. However, that is not the case there are various factors which can affect the economy of a nation. The author fails to mention some reasons like corruption, recessions, etc. All these factors are also responsible for the downfall of a nation economically. But, the author fails to give any clarification on this.
Secondly, he stresses on the fact that by only making the borders strong will help to check the number of illegal immigrants. But that's not true only by making the borders strong won't stop them from intruding. The immigrants might find some other way to barge into the country and that will not help in supporting the outcome which the author is expecting. So these details are also absent and more light must be shed on this too.
Last but not least, not all immigrants are a threat to the country. However, because of them, the country becomes rich in tradition and culture. It grows because there are opportunities for exchange of thoughts and people can learn so many new things. The country becomes live and free. The foreigners must not feel like imprisoned when they visit the country. The country's attitude must be assertive and friendly to welcome people from other countries.
Hence, as it is evident from the aforementioned analysis, the claims put forward by the author have not been fortified with relevant feedbacks, statistics, and comparative data. Thus, they fail to convince the reader.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 320 350
No. of Characters: 1550 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.229 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.844 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.52 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.834 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.297 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.539 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
According to the authors conclusion, illegal immigrants are a se...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 351, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...ms made by the editor of the newspaper. Lets shine some light on them. First and ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...k the number of illegal immigrants. But thats not true only by making the borders str...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 362, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...imprisoned when they visit the country. The countrys attitude must be assertive and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 319.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00313479624 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62857104099 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532915360502 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.261458245 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.0 119.503703932 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1904761905 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173760353836 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459439852846 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483712573284 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.086773862812 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544380624717 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.3799401198 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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