The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the proposal the vice-president is offering monitoring the workers internet usage and the time spent on the personal activities to increase the productivity and the profits of the company. However, vice-president seems to be making some assumptions to back up his argument. Which, if proven wrong, will be a big factor in the weakening of the position.
Firstly, the vice-president is assuming that the workers are using the company computers when they are doing something personal. While it is possible that people might be using the internet in the office for out of work reasons, it does not necessarily have to be the work computers. They can be using their personal electronics for those reasons and in that case installing a monitoring software would not be helpful to restrict it. Therefore, vice-president’s argument will be weakened that monitoring the internet activity will increase the productivity.
Secondly, the proposal is assuming that the employees are actually wasting time in the office and it needs to be reduced. In fact, there is not any data or information showing that happening. It is possible that the workers are doing their best and the profits are in their highest possible point already. If that is the case, the argument and the proposal in the report will automatically become irrelevant.
In summary, while the general idea and correlation between not wasting time and higher productivity makes sense in order to pursue the proposal the assumptions we discussed above should be confirmed. Such that, if the workers are actually wasting time surfing the internet during the business hours and if they are using the work computers to do so. If both assumptions are in the favour of the vice-president, then it would make sense to install the software to monitor the employees.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 62, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'workers'' or 'worker's'?
Suggestion: workers'; worker's
...icepresident is offering monitoring the workers internet usage and the time spent on th...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 279, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...sumptions to back up his argument Which if proven wrong will be a big factor in th...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, in fact, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1488.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 297.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0101010101 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83491686285 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 204.123752495 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43771043771 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.0 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 19.7664670659 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 297.0 22.8473053892 1300% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 57.8364921388 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1488.0 119.503703932 1245% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 297.0 23.324526521 1273% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 104.0 5.70786347227 1822% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128603242973 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128603242973 0.0743258471296 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0811178525292 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221335045358 0.0628817314937 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 150.7 14.3799401198 1048% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -229.98 48.3550499002 -476% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.1628742515 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 119.1 12.197005988 976% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.26 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 21.34 8.32208582834 256% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 56.0 98.500998004 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 12.3882235529 468% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 120.8 11.1389221557 1084% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 58.0 11.9071856287 487% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 62, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'workers'' or 'worker's'?
Suggestion: workers'; worker's
...icepresident is offering monitoring the workers internet usage and the time spent on th...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 279, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...sumptions to back up his argument Which if proven wrong will be a big factor in th...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, in fact, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1488.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 297.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0101010101 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83491686285 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 204.123752495 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43771043771 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.0 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 19.7664670659 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 297.0 22.8473053892 1300% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 57.8364921388 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1488.0 119.503703932 1245% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 297.0 23.324526521 1273% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 104.0 5.70786347227 1822% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128603242973 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128603242973 0.0743258471296 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0811178525292 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221335045358 0.0628817314937 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 150.7 14.3799401198 1048% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -229.98 48.3550499002 -476% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.1628742515 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 119.1 12.197005988 976% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.26 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 21.34 8.32208582834 256% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 56.0 98.500998004 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 12.3882235529 468% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 120.8 11.1389221557 1084% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 58.0 11.9071856287 487% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.