"We must reduce overhead here at the cafe. Instead of opening at 6 a.m. weekdays, we will not open at 8 a.m. On weekends, we will only be open from 9 a.m. until 4 p.m. The decrease in hours of operation will help save money because we won't be paying for utilities, employee wages, or other operating costs during the hours we are closed. This is the best strategy for us to save money and remain in business without having to eliminate jobs."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to assess the reasonableness of both the prediction and the argument upon which it is based. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The owner of Juniper Cafe asserts that they must reduce overhead at the cafe in order to save money. By reducing the amount of hours the cafe stays open, they will be able to remain in business, without having to eliminate jobs. The evidence the owner provides for this assertion is that they will not have to pay for utilities, employee wages, or other operational costs during the hours they are closed. The owner of the Juniper Cafe relies on assumptions with no clear evidence and fails to explain why they need to save money in the first place.
First, the owner assumes that employees will not quit due to the loss of hours. The cafe will not be paying employee wages for the hours they are not open, but what is stopping the employees from getting a new job that will pay them for more hours? It is often true that employees have a job because they need the money. If Juniper Cafe is reducing their hours and thus, paying them less, employees may quit as a result.
Another assumption the owner relies on without providing conclusive evidence, is that there are no other ways to save money without eliminating people's jobs. There has to be some other way the owner could save money, other than cutting hours of operation. By reducing the amount of hours the cafe is open, this may result in a reduced amount of customers that visit the cafe. Instead of saving the cafe money, it could be losing even more money than expected with the loss of customers. From the statement made by the owner, we are left assuming that the cafe needs to save money. The lack of evidence makes it hard to distinguish whether the cafe wants, or needs to save money.
This argument could be further strengthened by including evidence to support the assumptions made in this memorandum. The owner of the Juniper Cafe could start by explaining why the cafe needs to save money in the first place. If the cafe has no need to save money, why do they want to save money? The owner could also talk with the employees and see how this change in scheduling will affect their inclination to work at the cafe. The Juniper Cafe needs to look at all possible outlets of saving money, rather than just cutting back hours of operation. The owner could do some research, or reach out to surrounding local businesses, asking them for tips on how to save money and remain in business.
In conclusion, the author may not be wrong to state that cutting back hours would help save money, but her lack of support of the current situation limits the possible outcomes. The owner must define the scope of the problem, and explain why saving money is so important at this point in time. Next, she must provide conclusive evidence that reducing overhead at the Juniper Cafe will, in fact, save money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 555, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, so, then, thus, as to, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2279.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 496.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59475806452 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25416479932 2.78398813304 81% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.395161290323 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1839351856 57.8364921388 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.0869565217 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5652173913 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32555788168 0.218282227539 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11287675831 0.0743258471296 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674064075935 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211835626746 0.128457276422 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294770092283 0.0628817314937 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.3550499002 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.5979740519 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.32208582834 83% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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