Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author responded in the negative direction about the origin of woven of woven baskets which was found in the prehistoric village of Palean, thus known as Palean baskets but afterwards due to recent discoveries in Lithos an ancient village across the Brim river from Palea, archeologists discovered baskets which are strongly similar to Palean baskets. But according to the author, the only way to cross the Brim river is boat. No such Palean boats are found by archeologists thus he suggested that Palean-baskets are not uniquely Palean. I strongly disagree with the author because author’s argument is rife with hole and assumptions.
The first example is mentioned about the crossing of Brim river between the two villages, Palea and Lithos. Author has claimed that the only way of transportation between two villages is Palean boat and such boats are not found. The argument weakening the theory by suggesting Palean boats are exist in ancient times but may be this boats have vanished. The argument can also be weakened by argument that Archeologists has not put efforts in finding another source of transportation such as there may be possibility of a bridge which connects two villages. The suggestions that improve argument to provide more attention towards archeological research and alternative sources of transportation.
The another example which counters the argument is that both villages belong to prehistoric times. However, there are many chances that baskets found in Lithos village are developed by villagers of Lithos and the art belong to them. This argument can be improved by discovering more evidences which provide a firm information about the timeline of developing this baskets and then proper comparison should be done by Archeologists.
Therefore, sum of all many plots in this argument are not discovered by Archeologists which shows that evidences are not enough to prove the given argument is correct. In my views the archeologists should increase their efforts in findings new clues and can work on other theories such as source of transportation and timeline of origin of baskets.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 339 350
No. of Characters: 1756 1500
No. of Different Words: 156 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.291 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.18 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.881 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.214 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.651 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'of woven'.
Suggestion: of woven
...the negative direction about the origin of woven of woven baskets which was found in the prehisto...
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Line 2, column 294, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...e theory by suggesting Palean boats are exist in ancient times but may be this boats ...
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Line 2, column 557, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...f a bridge which connects two villages. The suggestions that improve argument to pr...
^^^
Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...mation about the timeline of developing this baskets and then proper comparison shou...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 339.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28613569322 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95076976889 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477876106195 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.9042756175 57.8364921388 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.846153846 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0769230769 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147597132437 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0585544390269 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058450344283 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0860869390475 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624941398544 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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