Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people Recently however archaeol

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Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

In the argument, the author concludes that the Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. He arrives at the conclusion by stating that similar baskets were also found in a region across a deep and broad river from Palea to which the Paleans could not have travelled as no Paleans boats have been discovered. While the reason given by the author seems valid for the use case, he is still hasty to jump to the conclusion without more research and analysis. As a result, the argumets seems flawed and rife with holes.
The author gives the reason that since unique woven Palean baskets were also found in Lithos, an ancient village across Brim River from Palea. He asserts that the validity of this reasoning by stating that the Brim river is deep and broad and couldn't have been crossed by Paleans as their boats have not been found till date. This cannot be enough to be considered as a basis for the conclusion that the author has hastily reached. There might have been a number of other ways through which the basket could have found its way from Palea to Lithos
Firstly, author assumes that since Palean boats were not found, they were incapable of crossing a deep and broad river such as the Brim. But author doesn't think about the fact Palean boats could be found in the future similar to how no baskets were found outside Palea until now. Also, if we consider the fact that Paleans were not a sailing people, there might also be a chance that they were contacted by other civilizations with sailing abilities and had obtained the baskets upon interaction. These possibilites would severely undermine the author's argument.
Moroever, the author doesn't delve deep into the history of the Brim River itself. There might be a possiblity that the river recoursed its way between Lithos and Palea after the end of Paleans through some natural calamity. Or it might also be that it was not so deep and broad during their time. Thus, there might have been a peripatetic interaction between Lithos and Paleans leading to the exchange of the basket.
Finally, author considers the discovery of only a single basket outside of Palea to arrive at his hasty conclusion. A single basket might have found its way across the river aided by a huge gust of wind during a severe storm or any other natural ways. The author is again ignorant of these possiblities.
In short, the argument by the author is facile as no proper evidence is put forth by him. It is seemingly obvious that the authors conclusion is hasty and implusive rather than being based on valid research, facts or statistics. The argument could have been strengthened if the author could have provided facts that the Paleans were never contacted by other civilizations during their existence. It could also have been strenghtened by providing a brief history on the Brim river which states that the river flowed through the same course in the same capacity as of today in the prehistoric times as well.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, so, still, then, thus, well, while, in short, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2412.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 514.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69260700389 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27791353358 2.78398813304 82% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.400778210117 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 764.1 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 19.7664670659 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 514.0 22.8473053892 2250% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 57.8364921388 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2412.0 119.503703932 2018% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 514.0 23.324526521 2204% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 106.0 5.70786347227 1857% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254424008006 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.254424008006 0.0743258471296 342% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15403345194 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550497033946 0.0628817314937 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 257.7 14.3799401198 1792% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -441.77 48.3550499002 -914% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.1628742515 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 202.6 12.197005988 1661% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.4 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 31.68 8.32208582834 381% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 12.3882235529 436% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 207.6 11.1389221557 1864% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 54.0 11.9071856287 454% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 517 350
No. of Characters: 2403 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.768 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.648 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.288 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.076 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.339 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5