Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author concludes that woven baskets which were characterized by a particular distinctive pattern and was previously believed to have been made only by the Palean people is not uniquely Palean. He cites as evidence, the lack of Palean boats in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea, where archaeologists have discovered a basket similar to the type woven in Palea. While the author’s conclusion might be valid, he needs to provide further evidence to bolster the credibility of his argument.
To begin, the author needs to verify if there are natives of Palea living in Lithos. Perhaps there are Palean people who have left their hometown and now reside in Lithos. They may have taken up the weaving of this baskets as their craft and means of survival in Lithos. In addition, they may have also taught the people of Lithos who were interested in the craft how to weave the baskets. This could explain the discovery of the Palean baskets in Lithos. For the author to prove that these baskets are not uniquely Palean, he needs provide evidence that the indigenous people of Palea never resided in Lithos or practiced their craft.
Furthermore, the author needs to provide evidence that Palean boats were the only mean of conveying these Palean baskets to Lithos. It is possible that there may have been traders from Lithos who visited Palea in the past and bought these baskets which they in turn took back to their hometown and sold for profit. It is also likely that merchants from places other than Lithos or Palea may have bought these baskets from Palea and sold them in Lithos. There may have also been a bridge across the Brim River which the citizens of Palea may have crossed on foot or by horseback to deliver their goods to Lithos. To increase the validity of his argument, the author needs to prove that Palean boats were the only means of transporting these baskets to Lithos.
In conclusion, the author’s argument that the woven baskets previously thought to be Palean are not uniquely Palean may be valid. However, as it stands now, it lacks sufficient evidence to bolster its credibility. To increase the persuasiveness of his argument, the author needs to providence evidence for the points cited above.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 384 350
No. of Characters: 1828 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.427 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.76 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.363 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.588 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.878 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.413 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.413 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.199 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 210, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
.... They may have taken up the weaving of this baskets as their craft and means of sur...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, so, while, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1870.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86979166667 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45333509362 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.419270833333 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 588.6 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3010737062 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5882352941 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35294117647 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300728137033 0.218282227539 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114109270972 0.0743258471296 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118649498111 0.0701772020484 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206548816214 0.128457276422 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115801363401 0.0628817314937 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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