Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café
The argument claims a recommendation of opening a cafe inside monarch book store based on many assumptions. Yet no evidence supports this assumptions.
To begin with, the recommendation provides weak analogy between the customers buying books and the same customers having coffee at cafe. The Customer who buys books from monarch, need not have necessity towards having coffee or spending time at cafe. Regular customers of monarch might not like to spend time in newly opened cafe and would enjoy their regular hangouts some where else.
Even assuming the recent national census decline for population under age ten, discontinuing children Book section does not hold support. The census fails to survey the location or city at which monarch is located. It might be possible the number of children at this city would have keen in learning books and this might have excluded by census survey.
There is yet another assumption that demographic coming to reagal books are similar to demographic visiting monarch book stores. Two business never be same until they share same demographic and equal tactics. Customers of regal Book store may enjoy just coffee and intrested in buying books. Whereas, the customers who are already fascinated by varieties book collection at monarch,may not be interested in coffee. Variance in demographic does not make both stores resemblance in business.
In conclusion the recommendation is inconclusive. To strengthen the recommendation, directors must show the demographic ages. It should have also provided much more evidence that census includes the city where monarch dwells. Finally to better evaluate the recommendation, I would need to know where regal book stores have same collection of books that monarch share and the actual business earned by regal is either by customers who buys books and have coffee.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'whereas', 'in conclusion', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.287066246057 0.25644967241 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.186119873817 0.15541462614 120% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0820189274448 0.0836205057962 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0567823343849 0.0520304965353 109% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0157728706625 0.0272364105082 58% => OK
Prepositions: 0.10094637224 0.125424944231 80% => OK
Participles: 0.0599369085174 0.0416121511921 144% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.81004785097 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0252365930599 0.026700313972 95% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0788643533123 0.113004496875 70% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0315457413249 0.0255425247493 124% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0220820189274 0.0127820249294 173% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1855.0 2731.13054187 68% => OK
No of words: 292.0 446.07635468 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.35273972603 6.12365571057 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.57801047555 90% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.38698630137 0.378187486979 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.297945205479 0.287650121315 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.219178082192 0.208842608468 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.119863013699 0.135150697306 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81004785097 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 207.018472906 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544520547945 0.469332199767 116% => OK
Word variations: 55.8059007181 52.1807786196 107% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 17.1764705882 23.2022227129 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8996969352 57.7814097925 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.117647059 141.986410481 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1764705882 23.2022227129 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.529411764706 0.724660767414 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 46.9709911362 51.9672348444 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.73170731707 1.8405768891 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.419309671482 0.441005458295 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108677746501 0.135418324435 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0717592927655 0.0829849096947 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.533378256954 0.58762219726 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.119504146549 0.147661913831 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161183234058 0.193483328276 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103514650192 0.0970749176394 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.21388819063 0.42659136922 50% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0727119377399 0.0774707102158 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258970173898 0.312017818177 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0916397937922 0.0698173142475 131% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More content wanted. For issue essays, around 450 words, for argument essays, around 400 words.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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