Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. The following appeared in a memorandum from administrative head of the international students' activities at Rydell College
"To better attend to the needs of the international students being admitted to Rydell College, we should build a new dining hall that serves food to students at subsidized rates. The current dining hall is very old and serves only expensive items and dishes, something that will certainly prevent future international students from applying to Rydell College. Building a new dining hall will avert this possibility and will definitely lead to a dramatic increase in a popularity of Rydell College. Moreover, a new dining hall will help Rydell College to justify an increased budget for educational improvement this year. Building a new dining hall will therefore be a great step. towards enhancing the ranking of Rydell College."
The author of the memorandum suggests that, there is a need to bulid new dining hall that serves cheaper food as old dining hall was very small and only served expensive items. Thus buliding a new dining hall will increase the popularity of Rydelll College and attract more international students which will lead to increase in budget for educational improvements. Therefore, buliding new dining hall will be a great step towards enhancing the ranking of college. At first the argument mighr seem convincing, but, diving deeper reveals several loop holes which need to be ansered with specific evidence, surveys and proofs. Without which the argument would not hold water.
Firstly, the author suggests that, for better attend the needs of international students admitted to Rydell College, we should build a new dining hall that serves food with subsidized rates. This seems quite absured, as the main motive of international students is education and not the quality of food. College should need to improve the qualtiy of education offred which will surely automatically atteract international students. Additionaly, cheaper and value for money education will be motivate students than cheaper food.
Secondly, according to prompt, the current dining hall is small and serves expensive food. Surely, the size of dining hall does play a significant role in growing the application rate of the college, it is the quality of education which will affect. If the college is highly ranked in its placement opportunities and educational aspects, then, for sure the students will not bother paying for high prices for food. Reducing the prices might reduce the quality of food and this demotivating international students.
Additionally, how can the author suggest that, a new dining hall will help in increasing the budget. No supporting evidence or proofs are provided to justify this statement. Even if, there is increas in budget, on what factors the author states that it will surely be used to improve the education.
Conclusively, the argument does not provide any specific evidence to justify the claims and sugges
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... small and only served expensive items. Thus buliding a new dining hall will increas...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, then, therefore, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 338.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29881656805 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73894996744 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51775147929 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.7543064572 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.352941176 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76470588235 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119895998937 0.218282227539 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505026767027 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546232754455 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0855505516804 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522975265408 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... small and only served expensive items. Thus buliding a new dining hall will increas...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, then, therefore, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 338.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29881656805 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73894996744 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51775147929 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.7543064572 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.352941176 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76470588235 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119895998937 0.218282227539 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505026767027 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546232754455 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0855505516804 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522975265408 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.