Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The following appeared in a memorandum from administrative head of the international students' activities at Rydell College
"To better attend to the needs of the international students being admitted to Rydell College, we should build a new dining hall that serves food to students at subsidized rates. The current dining hall is very old and serves only expensive items and dishes, something that will certainly prevent future international students from applying to Rydell College. Building a new dining hall will avert this possibility and will definitely lead to a dramatic increase in a popularity of Rydell College. Moreover, a new dining hall will help Rydell College to justify an increased budget for educational improvement this year. Building a new dining hall will therefore be a great step towards enhancing the ranking of Rydell College."
The administrative head of the international students activites has drawn a optimistic conclusion on the baes of faulty and incomplete evidences that building a dining hall will increase the rank and admits in Rydell College.
The head states that 'to better attend to the needs of the international students', there has been no mention of any survey that was conducted with facilitates that the student want a new dining hall. The absence of statistical data about how many internation students come to Rydell College every year is also missing. If the number of internation students is less then a new dinning hall might be of no use. The absence of survey and number of votes to build a new hall, it can be said that it is a faulty argument.
The claim that the current dining hall serves only expensive items and dishes which internation students can not afford might be not completely right. It is very true that international students are on a tight budget but the might have other reasons not to opt for dining food. The reasons could be that the have a specific dietary requrirement which the dining facility can not fulfill or the food which they prefer based on their regional and cultural upbringing is not available in dining facilities and they prefer the cook by themself. Hence certain edivence are required to conclude that it is the price factor which is keeping students away from dining.
A new dining hall will add to the popularity of the college, such claims are very vague and unjustified. In no way can a dining hall add to a institutes popularity, a institute can increase its popularity only through opportunities it provides to their students. And to show a increase in budget for educational improvement, the college can invest in a much better place like libraries, classroom, better faculties than dinig.
In genral, it may be said that the head has failed to make a convincing argument because of complete abscence of statistical data and no convincing reason being provided. The argument ends with an entirely unjustified optimistic conclusion based on wishy-washy obserations that are likely to be in correct.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 362 350
No. of Characters: 1753 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.362 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.843 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.784 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.298 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.357 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.634 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 75, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ernational students activites has drawn a optimistic conclusion on the baes of fa...
^
Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hat the student want a new dining hall. The absence of statistical data about how m...
^^^
Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... number of internation students is less then a new dinning hall might be of no use. ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 542, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...s and they prefer the cook by themself. Hence certain edivence are required to conclu...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 141, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ied. In no way can a dining hall add to a institutes popularity, a institute can ...
^
Line 7, column 143, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'institutes'' or 'institute's'?
Suggestion: institutes'; institute's
...d. In no way can a dining hall add to a institutes popularity, a institute can increase it...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 166, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ng hall add to a institutes popularity, a institute can increase its popularity o...
^
Line 7, column 276, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...provides to their students. And to show a increase in budget for educational impr...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 362.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94751381215 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8418809535 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.453145527 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.928571429 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8571428571 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.70786347227 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116011100938 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425330215532 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0295035660492 0.0701772020484 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0689056852057 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373079147892 0.0628817314937 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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