Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reasons on which that claim is based.
CLAIM: The value of integrating different disciplines in a curriculum is overestimated in the
present times. REASON: Educational training ought to be centered around creating groundwork for a particular vocation and therefore students should be persuaded to focus only on one area of study.
Educaton plays an important role in shapeing your lives and is the core element to achieve your dreams. The prompt suggests that, the valus if integrating various kinds of subjects and values in a curriculum is overestimated in present time. Which is due to, educational training ought to be centered around and thus creating groundwork for a perticular vocation and thus students should be persuaded to focus mainly on one area of study. In my openion, i strongly disagree with the claim as this would just weaken the educational system of the society.
Education has various paths and forms to achieve and we need to persue them accordingly. There couldn't be a fixed or strict path to follow to achieve our desired goal to achieve the prime motivw of our lives: education. If a perticular student is forced to take up a subject in which the individual does not have any interest, then he/she might no be able to give their best and thus leading to stress and anxiety. Thus there should be many diffresnt subjects and vocation to choose from. By doing this the stucdent will be able to chosse the subjects of intereset and will be able to persue his dream. For example, if Elon Musk was forced to take up humanities, rather than data science or codeing related subjects. He might not be able to build up the most advanced companies like spacex, tesla with a futurestic goals. Thus, vocational subjects in a curriculum play an important role.
Forcing students to persue only on one area of studes might also not help, because there should be an overall development, having basic knowledge about various fields will surely help in various ways. This will help to choose in future which branch or field to take up for our carrer which builds intrest in us and thus solves the confusion of which firld to chosse.
Thus vocational subjects should be included in our curriculum whilch helps the student
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...and thus leading to stress and anxiety. Thus there should be many diffresnt subjects...
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Suggestion: Thus,
... confusion of which firld to chosse. Thus vocational subjects should be included ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, if, so, then, thus, as for, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1579.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 329.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79939209726 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52615954824 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559270516717 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9896111481 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.266666667 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86666666667 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110822367709 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397233501345 0.0831039109588 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541571649054 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0767762803762 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553439025091 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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