Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
In this argument, the arguer recommends that the Grove College preserve its centry-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. In support of this recommendation, the arguer provides several pieces of evidence. However, a careful examination of tha argument would reveal how groudless this conclusion is.
Firstly, to convince us readers, the author has to point out the evidence that the number of students in the sample is enough to represent the opinion of students in the whole school. If the students responding to a survey are only a small part of students, it might well happen that most of these students are just those who support all-female education in Grove College. Thus, the result from this survey is not reliable. In addition, the ratio of alumnae answering the separate survey to all alumnae is unknown as well. Perhaps that same problem exists in this survey as well.
Secondly, even if the result of survey is reliable, one evidence that needs to be strengthened is that keeping the college all female will truly improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep the college financially. Since we have no idea about the morale among students now and how all-female education influence the morale, perhaps that keeping the college all female has no obvious influence on the girls, which means they change nothing because of keeping the tradition, those working hard still endeavoring to get better academic performance while those indulging themselves in entertainment still having no interest in learning. In that case, this behavior of keeping all-female education seems to help less in inspire morale. Also, it is perfectly possible that the half of the alumnae, who are in favor of coeducation, will feel less motivated to support the college financially. Therefore, this recommendation could bring nothing beneficial to this college.
Last but not least, without offering that faculty members will not change their attitude to serve this college if the all-female education continues, the author fails to substantiate the recommendation made by president and administrative staff of Grove College. As the majority part of the faculty members approve the coeducation, if their ideas failed to be considered, then this may negatively influence their enthusiastic for devoting themselves to school. This possibility further weakens the arguer’s opinion.
To sum up, the author’s recommendation is critically weakened by these possibilities. He still needs to provide more convincing evidence to convince us.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 2122 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.252 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.825 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.392 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.297 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 437, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...his survey is not reliable. In addition, the ratio of alumnae answering the separ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2191.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 404.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42326732673 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95387684955 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524752475248 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 689.4 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.2709979223 57.8364921388 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.722222222 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 5.70786347227 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119714727003 0.218282227539 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.038563448952 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409003771905 0.0701772020484 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0764375698092 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336682105133 0.0628817314937 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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