ISSUE:
Claim: The emergence of the online "blogosphere" has significantly weakened the quality of political discourse in the United States.
Reason: When anyone can publish political opinions easily, standards for covering news and political topics will inevitably decline.
The author claims that the quality of political conversations and discussions has deteriorated because of the emergence of the online "blogosphere". The blogosphere has given the right to every individual to express his or her opinion which the writer sights as the reason behind the drop. In my view I don't completely disagree with the author, but I do so to a certain extent.
Firstly, every individual has the 'RIGHT TO SPEECH'. Albeit we are in the 21st century, not all the individuals on the planet feel free to express themselves. Some don't have the desired means to convey their thoughts ...
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Sentence: With the legalised acceptance of these blogs, a feeling of 'BELONGING' will prevail among the citizens.
Error: legalised Suggestion: legalized
Sentence: Thus, inspite of the above points, a blogosphere will always prove beneficial because the negative points seem to be meager in front of the advantages.
Error: inspite Suggestion: in spite
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