1.Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.Write a response in which you discuss t

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1. Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

The author claims that there is should be the obligation of leader alteration after five years management in whole fields. He also supports his claim with the reason of renewing of all activities through the novel leadership. I firmly disagree with the mentioned claim and its supportive reason. In what follows I will list my reasons that foibles the claim and reason.
The first reason which cast doubt about the claim is the general perspective of the claim. As mentioned, the author assumed the alteration of the leadership is all fields will be effective. However, from my perspective, it is not valid. For instance, in the educational system, in our country, the average of the education period for a student from his primary school till the graduation from the high school lasts for 12 years. In this case, the result of the effectiveness of the presented method by the leader at the field of the educational system is illustrated after the 12 years. Besides, the alteration of leader means the novel system which requires an adaptation period. At the example of educational system, it will be really difficult and time-consuming task for the students to forget the previous system presented by the previous core person and adapting the new one.
The second reason is the short period which is mentioned in the claim part. Indeed, the mentioned five years is not a sufficient period for the leaders to present their success at their responsible fields. It is obvious that each responsibility requires a period until the accountable person gets mature over the issue to presents his or her optimum function. This adaptation over the issue and getting control over his or her responsibility requires further time. According to the noteworthy, intelligent survey conducted by the Iran- Politic research group, at the election, 80 percent of people in Iran vote to the same s or president candidate after his first presidency experience, even he does not present the desired function during his first four presidency period. This belief of this action is during the first four years he could get control over the task and solve the problems caused by the previous presidency, and during the next four years, he would execute his promised and mentioned goals.
Finally, the reason which supports the claim states that the revitalization of any enterprise depends on the novel leadership. Actually, it is not a cogent reason, the leader is not the only factor for renewal and success. Factors such as the workers' knowledge, efficiency, implemented the system, and financial source are effective at the renewal of the task. In addition, finding a skillful manager for the task is not as easy as assumed in this reason; and if an enterprise finds its desired leader, it should overestimate the leader’s value. For instance, is it a rational thing to get new leaders instead of Bill Gates or Steve Jobs, since we require the revitalization in the office?! Of course not, gaining the leader such as Bill Gates and Steve Jobs occurs rarely during the activity duration of any accomplishment, who should be considered valuable and tried gain advantages of them.

Finally, to wrap it up, according to the listing factors at the above paragraphs, the shift of the leadership at all fields after the five years is not a logical task, and this even could cause to failures.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 30, Rule ID: IS_SHOULD[1]
Message: Did you mean 'it'?
Suggestion: it
The author claims that there is should be the obligation of leader alte...
Line 4, column 243, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'workers'' or 'worker's'?
Suggestion: workers'; worker's
...enewal and success. Factors such as the workers knowledge, efficiency, implemented the ...
Line 4, column 764, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually put before the verb 'occurs'.
Suggestion: rarely occurs
...eader such as Bill Gates and Steve Jobs occurs rarely during the activity duration of any acc...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, finally, first, however, if, really, second, so, for instance, in addition, of course, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2813.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 563.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99644760213 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77829196905 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461811722913 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 864.9 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.38483146067 296% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.2964734933 60.3974514979 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.304347826 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4782608696 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17391304348 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213263612852 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07047095539 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549512764039 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12137877137 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455770406709 0.0667264976115 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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