35-)“Society should identify those children who have special talents and provide training for them at an early age to develop their talents.”
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Education has an indispensable importance for a society. Nowadays, it is easy to see that the most developed countries are also the ones which have well-educated people more. In this education process, society should be aware of its human resources from the beginning and so they should identify the special talents and prepare appropriate environment for their progress. However, although it sounds great at first glance, this prompt includes some missing approaches.
To start with, efficiency is an important issue that society handle. A good company manager should be aware of the resources that they have as a company before attempting any job. He should lead the company to use the company’s resources in efficient way. Likewise, a society should identify his resources at first if it wants to reach higher developed status in efficient way. The most important resources are of course human resources for a society. Societies should identify those children who have special talents and provide good training program for them at an early ages to develop their talents. If the society manages this identifying process well, then this provides the opportunity to society to benefit from these talents more ,otherwise these abilities may go waste. Furthermore, if they make these talents come together, they provide them more competitive environment which results in higher success most probably.
However, fairness is another important concept for a society. One cannot reveal his potential easily. We should provide chance to all students to be able to have this training right. Those students who seem not smart at their early age and are not chosen for this training program should be given opportunity in the future periods. Moreover, who decide to choose the right talents, are they eligible to make such decision, what tests should be applied, will these test be available for all students are of some important questions to be answered.
All in all, it will be beneficial for a society to know its human resources and taking right steps accordingly. Identifying special talents at their early age and training them is a logical step. In this way, society may reach the desired point in more efficient way. However, the conclusions of this application regarding to fairness should not be overlooked.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 218, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...b. He should lead the company to use the company's resources in efficient wa...
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Line 3, column 745, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ciety to benefit from these talents more ,otherwise these abilities may go waste. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, furthermore, however, if, likewise, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, well, of course, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 372.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73479330187 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481182795699 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3741561462 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7142857143 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 5.21951772744 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306119011945 0.243740707755 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100692278688 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112469766972 0.0758088955206 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19268615579 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643963767839 0.0667264976115 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.