The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Writer of this letter is anxious about the density of the island and the possible conclusions that derive from this density at summer seasons. As it is stated that mopeds are used as a popular form of transformation at Balmer Island. He thinks that if population increases, then the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians will also increase ,so the number of mopeds rented by the island’s moped rental companies should be decreased. However, town council of Balmer island should answer the following questions and then should make their decision according to the answers of these questions.
First of all, town council should ask the following: “Are we sure that traffic accidents spring from the increase on total number of mopeds that are rented at summer?”. If the answer is no to this question, then some other reasons should be thought. Maybe, the main reason of the traffic accident is the young children of the vacationers that comes to Balmer island at summer. Maybe they use these mopeds carelessly and they don’t even have driver licence. If this is so, instead of limitation the number of renting, the usage of mopeds by the noneligible driver should be prohibited.
Secondly, if the answer to the above question is yes, then the following question should be asked: ”Can we really decrease the total number of mopeds at the island with this new regulation?”. People of the Balmer island may have tendency to resort to illegal ways under some restricting conditions or maybe there will be the increase of the number of the rental companies which they just rent mopeds up to 25, but the total number of mopeds that are rented may have higher than previous level. So the council should take this reasoning into the consideration and then should take any action after this reasoning.
Finally, the council should be aware of the fact that things may change. If it is achieved at the Seaville, there is no guarantee that Balmer island’s people give the same reaction to this limitation. Seaville island and Balmer island may have extremely different geoghraphic conditions. So it is not logical to make same decision by just looking at the results. I am not asserting that after this regulation the total number of the accidents will not reduce, maybe it will reduce more than Seaville but the point that I want to reach is that the differences should also be taken into consideration in the different places.
All in all, before putting this recommendation into the action, the council of Balmer island should make such reasoning that they should be sure whether asserted reason is the main reason and then if it is so, then they should be sure whether the recommended solution is the optimal one. Moreover they shouldn’t miss out the fact that things may change and people’s reaction cannot be the same at everywhere.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 484 350
No. of Characters: 2308 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.69 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.769 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.47 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.474 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.253 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.533 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 355, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...opeds and pedestrians will also increase ,so the number of mopeds rented by the is...
^^
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...nted at summer?'. If the answer is no to this question, then some other reaso...
^^
Line 9, column 289, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ecommended solution is the optimal one. Moreover they shouldn't miss out the fact t...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.9520958084 193% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2417.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 482.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01452282158 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7294114099 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429460580913 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 736.2 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.0805630582 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.210526316 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3684210526 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73684210526 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2134328802 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0870732651199 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780795964681 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15057478025 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826745377119 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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