89. All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether all parents should be required to volunteer time to their children’s schools. Indisputably, forces all parents to volunteer their time is inadequate, because some of them might have work to do. I do agree that every parent will have their own business, nevertheless, children is the most valuable property for parents, which I believed, therefore, should not the parents spend more time on their children or even children school in order to demonstrate that they really put their children on the first place? Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that the parent should focus on their business and not even care about the volunteer work of the schools, and would argue that why parents should be required to volunteer time to their children’s schools.
First of all, parents should be required to volunteer time to their children’s schools. I would like to point out that the volunteer work can help the parents better understand the school, nonetheless, they can participate in the route that their children grow. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. My parents didn’t do the volunteer work for the school where I studied at. Hence, it’s hard for me to share those events happened in my school, because they didn’t know my classmate, my teacher, and even what my school look likes. In the circumstance, my parent didn’t participant any events happened in my school, because my school didn’t force parents to do volunteer work, which allow them having choices, and decided not to do. Consequently, it is pretty obvious that parents should be required to volunteer time to their children’s school.
But it’s also worth considering that the parents should not be required to volunteer time to their children’s school. Specifically, for those parents whose work are not that free, they would have to be in the office on time, under this circumstance, it’s impossible to required them to do volunteer work, which equals to force them quitting their job. A good case would be my own experience. My parent has to be in the office around 8.00 AM, and the volunteer work of my school such as escorting the children to pass the road, is also at around 8.00 AM till 8:30 AM. As a result, it’s impossible for my parent to do that kind of volunteer work. Both common sense and personal experience have told us that parent should balance between their work and children volunteer work, I believed that there must be some work that my parent could done in time that they are available, but they chose not to do it. Hence, all the evidence demonstrates that parents should be required to participate the volunteer work of their children school.
In conclusion, although parents might be busy and not available to do the volunteer work for their children’s school, but forcing parents to do the volunteer work has some difficulty. As long as measurements are performed, or some area involved, I believe school should advocate or slightly push parents to do the volunteer work for their children. In fact, this will provide benefit for parents and schools, last but the most important, their childrens.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 837, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have done' or 'do'?
Suggestion: have done; do
... must be some work that my parent could done in time that they are available, but th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, look, nevertheless, nonetheless, really, so, therefore, thus, as to, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 33.0505617978 233% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2674.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 534.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0074906367 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73957429034 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.38202247191 0.4932671777 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 769.5 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 6.24550561798 304% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.6664876475 60.3974514979 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.333333333 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52380952381 5.21951772744 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.579782316157 0.243740707755 238% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.288366416805 0.0831039109588 347% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.209682125026 0.0758088955206 277% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.459387487537 0.150359130593 306% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10045745437 0.0667264976115 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 100.480337079 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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