80. In a study of the reading habits of Waymarsh citizens conducted by the University of Waymarsh, most respondents said they preferred literary classics as reading material. However, a second study conducted by the same researchers found that the type of book most frequently checked out of each of the public libraries in Waymarsh was the mystery novel. Therefore, it can be concluded that the respondents in the first study had misrepresented their reading preferences.
The author of this argument claims that Waymarsh citizens misrepresented their reading preferences. However, this assumption rests on many skewed assumptions, and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands.
To begin with, the author mentioned that the most checked out in library is the mystery novel. On the other hand, the author proposed that this contradicted to the study conducted by the university of Waymarsh, which most respondents said they preferred literary. But the author failed to consider the possibility that for those who owned their copy of literary classics inside their home, are not going to library and borrowed the reading material which they already possessed. Therefore, the author needs to provide more details about the study for readers to be convinced.
But it’s also worth considering that those people checked out mystery novel might not be the same group as those citizens that the survey studied. For example, for people who tend to go to public libraries might be teenager or college students. Therefore, they probably preferred mystery novel or sci-fi novel, rather than literary classic, such as Les Miserables.
Last but not least, the author didn’t consider what if there’s some problem about the way that the process of study. For instance, there is no choice of mystery novel for Waymarsh citizens, who underwent investigation by University of Waymarsh, therefore result of the study come out to be varied significantly. In conclusion, the author should give sufficient details about how the survey being conducted by the University of Waymarsh, in order to make the standing of the argument being persuasive.
To sum up, the arguer fails to substantiate his claims that Waymarsh citizens misrepresented their reading preferences. Because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what arguer maintains. To make It more convincing, he would have to demonstrate some details mentioned in previous paragraph. As a result, if the argument had included the given factors discussed above, it would be more thorough and logically acceptable.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 333 350
No. of Characters: 1725 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.272 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.18 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.721 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.812 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.317 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.812 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.061 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 121, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...srepresented their reading preferences. Because the evidence cited in the analysis does...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 332.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38253012048 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84182078035 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530120481928 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5579413837 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.6875 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.125 5.70786347227 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236630120844 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0741069179 0.0743258471296 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871839652793 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124842891691 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697234329977 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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