The author of the issue states that when we judge an action, the most important aspect that should be considered is the result of the action. To support this argument, he points out that the results of an action are more important than the intent of those who perform the action. Due to the controversial nature of the topic, there is not a general argument for this issue. I however, to a great extend, agree with this statement. In the ensuing paragraphs, several convincing reasons will be delineated.
For one thing, a lot of actions that do good to the human and society are performed by people who do not have the intents that we would admire. For example, The Great Wall was built by Empire Qin, who was obsessed with totalarism, and wanted to centralized and fort his power over the country, which may not be a good intent that the whole society would appreciate. However, the result of this action, The Great Wall, has successfully protect the people in central and southern part of China from invasion and secure the prosper of the economy. What's more, The Great Wall not only is regarded as one of the greatest constructions in the world, but also represents the unity and pride of Chinese people, which cannot be denied or deprecated only by the initial intent.
For another, what matters in the development of a society is the objective results from a bunch of individuals or group actions instead of the subjective intends of them. Edison invented a lot of creative things in his life. Even though his intent was not developing the society or building a better life for human, but just making profit for his company, what we remember is his contribution to the world, including the invention of light bulb.
However, what I have alluded to above does not draw the whole picture and is not suitable for all contexts. In some cases, the intent of an action may be more important to us. For example, we appreciate a lot of good deal even though their physical good may be small, because the spirit behind them is priceless. Let's boldly image that a policeman died when he want to save someone from a crime. We may think that it dose not deserve. But the whole society may be inspired by his spirit, which could not be measured simply.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, for example, for one thing, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 400.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6375 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48564755144 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.740449438202 540% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4539757754 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.055555556 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2222222222 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273460225218 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0938824255512 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128192748395 0.0758088955206 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178469774028 0.150359130593 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108205320421 0.0667264976115 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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