In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In the contemporary society, there is a tumultuous influx of media information such that denomination of a celebrity has become common. The media and even the government deliberately derogates the reputations of the famous to earn financial success, or hide their wrongdoing. Nevertheless, not all celebrities suffer from this phenomenon: there are few people that actually benefit from this media coverage.
First of all, the mass media corporations produce profit by catching significant attention from the society. To gather interest, they disclose scandals of prominent celebrities, sportsman, government officials because these types of information are the most piquant. Hence, the reputation of the famous are constantly in danger due to these companies' ceaseless effort to pry open their bad actions. For instance, recently in Korea Sung-Lee a famous singer was indicted for rape and illegal drug usage. The news spread quickly by the internet, Kakao-talk (an online communication system) and television, and people were both shocked and interested. The media was able to make great profit out of this single issue because people got really interested in the fact that a seemingly good man was actually a bad guy, and they were able to produce lots of contents with this issue.
Next, taking celebrities down are sometimes used by the government to distract people from focusing on government pitfalls. For instance, President Lee Myung Pak disclosed the news that Kang Ho Dong, the most prominent MC in Korea, has violated tax laws to shadow his own tax deviations. Kang was forced to take a rest and stop all his activities while President Lee was able to successfully hide his illegal profit. Consequently, celebrities are in a position of constant threat rather than in a position of admiration.
Nevertheless, there are some prominent people that take advantage of this media obsession. For instance, Sadio Mane, a professional football player revealed that he donates much of his weakly wage to support the construction of schools and provide food supply to his penurious country. These good actions of this player spread fast on the internet and everybody around the world appreciates and admires him, not just because of his great performances on the pitch, but because he seems to have a warm heart. Therefore, not all well-known people suffer from the attack of mass media: some uses it to build a good reputation.
In conclusion, the false moves of the famous may be a great prey for the media and the government officials, and thus maintaining a good reputation has become ever more difficult. However, some judiciously use it to their advantage and promoting their repute.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as for, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2273.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 433.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24942263279 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92425814104 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540415704388 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1933691696 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.631578947 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7894736842 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.73684210526 5.21951772744 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0910369119665 0.243740707755 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0283450948686 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0291672323368 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0538735692356 0.150359130593 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213078684815 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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