Agree or disagree Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child s success in school
This topic leads me to think of my classmates who has affected my thoughts a lot, when I was still an undergraduate. This raises the question of whether classmates are a more imperative influence than parents on a child's success in school. My view is that classmates actually have an essential influence than parents on my success in school.
First of all, classmates’ ideas are closer to our thoughts than parents’. For example, I study in mechanical engineering, and I often concern about whether I can have a bright future in my career and have many questions about my major. In the meantime, I usually express my thought to my classmate and ask help from them. Fortunately, Because we are the same age, there is no much difference between our ideas, and they can always offer me some perfect solutions to my questions and lead me to the right way. In contrast, parents may not solve my issues because we are not the same generation. Thus, my parents can’t really understand my feelings, and I can’t also transfer my concerns to them .
Second, classmates are more intelligent than parents. For instance, I study in National Cheng Kung University, and most of my classmates have exceptional ability to resolve the problems which occur in our classes or experiments. As a result, when I face some difficulty, I can normally hold my questions to consult them directly, and they can also deal with my issues immediately. However, because there are a lot of challenging subjects in my major, I may not usually anticipate that my parent can solve my problems, like calculus or physics.
To conclude, these are the two reasons why I hold the belief that classmates are a more imperative influence than parents on a child's success in school. In addition, I would say that classmates not only make us more successful in school, but also influence our morality in our life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 130, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...was still an undergraduate. This raises the question of whether classmates are a more imperative influe...
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Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
..., Because we are the same age, there is no much difference between our ideas, and ...
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Line 3, column 694, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... can’t also transfer my concerns to them . Second, classmates are more intellig...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 322.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85093167702 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87937014991 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518633540373 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3177359572 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.133333333 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4666666667 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4666666667 5.21951772744 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262097261268 0.243740707755 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141196542611 0.0831039109588 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16122286404 0.0758088955206 213% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239535679924 0.150359130593 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.164082292429 0.0667264976115 246% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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