Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most people can solve important problems in their lives by themselves or with the help of their families; help from the government is often unnecessary.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People often must deal with lots of tough issues to by themselves. This will raise the question of whether most people can solve important problems in their lives by themselves instead of being helped by the government. I disagree with the statement.
First of all, when people face financial problems they usually search for help from the government because the government can provide them with subsidies. For example, when I was an undergraduate, I studies in the National Taiwan University. I always had to rent an apartment outside the campus to live. However, the price of apartments near the campus were always expensive, and I did not have enough funds to afford these apartments. Fortunately, the Taipei city government just built many brand-new apartments, and the local government would offer a lower rents to the students. Therefore, I decided to lend other housings being offered by the local government, and these residences were relatively lower. Finally, I could have an affordable apartment to live at that time. By contrast, if I had not chosen to rent the apartment provided by the local government, I might have not been able to find a place to live.
Second, people always need to be helped by the government when they confront judicial issues. For instance, when I was an undergraduate, I lived in a city which had a higher crime rate. One day, I found that some cash in my apartment was stolen by the thieves. Therefore, I searched for the help from the owner of the apartment immediately. However, even if he reviewed the monitor of the apartment, we could not obtain some useful clues. Finally, I decided to ask help from the police. The police utilized many advanced tools, such as a face-detecting machine, to help me to find the thieves. As a result, I could get my money back in the end due to the assistance of the police. In contrast, if I had not decided to require the police to tackle this case, I might have not been capable of finding my funds back forever.
To sum up, I disagree with the statement. For one thing, we will often need to utilize the subsidies provided by the government. For another thing, we will always search for help from the government to address many judicial problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: WHETHER
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...ssues to by themselves. This will raise the question of whether most people can solve important problem...
Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'study'
...example, when I was an undergraduate, I studies in the National Taiwan University. I al...
Line 5, column 566, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help me find' instead.
Suggestion: help me find
...s, such as a face-detecting machine, to help me to find the thieves. As a result, I could get m...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, another thing, for example, for instance, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all, for another thing, for one thing, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79533678756 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75960246824 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479274611399 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4575280427 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.4782608696 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7826086957 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.08695652174 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244238251156 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077084787927 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900584104503 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187494637053 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12718536382 0.0645574589148 197% => OK
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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