An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
According to author doctors should share their patients medical details to an ailing patient so that ailing patient may better determine whether doctor is competent to treat that medical condition. I disagree with the author's claim for following 2 reasons.
Firstly, Not all patient are comfortable with sharing their medical history. Medical documents are very sensitive and advised to be kept personal. Since a medical document may contain many personal things patient might not want to share it. For instance, I patient who has OCD for cleaniness would'nt want others to know about it or A student diagnosed with aldy (learning disability) might feel embarassed if other people knows about it. Few people are very sentive when it comes to medical condition and we should respect that. The sharing should be done only after patients permission.
Before sharing we have to also check the integrity of the ailing patient. There is high risk that the patient might use those confidential health records for wrong purpose in the future. For instance, If a relative of mine found my health records he might share it with all my relatives which I would'nt be comfortable with. Also It would'nt be of much help for the patient to examine the competent of the doctor because in todays world its not a rocket science to create a false document. A doctor might create multiple false document of similiar medical condition to prove his competent.
Some may argue that this is best means through which we can examine competent of the doctor. Well there are other methods too which can be used. A doctor with years of experience in treating the medical condition would mostly be good at it. We can also ask for the contact details of previously treated person for their inputs rather than asking for whole medical record.
In conclusion, sharing a medical records of patient is an imprudent and unethical step. Even if doctors want to share the medical records for some reason it should be with the patient consent or doctor should encourage the ailing patient to contact previous patient directly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 30, Rule ID: COMFORTABLE_WITH_VBG[1]
Message: Use simply 'comfortable sharing'.
Suggestion: comfortable sharing
...easons. Firstly, Not all patient are comfortable with sharing their medical history. Medical document...
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Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sitive and advised to be kept personal. Since a medical document may contain many per...
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Line 3, column 293, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...e, I patient who has OCD for cleaniness wouldnt want others to know about it or A stude...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...done only after patients permission. Before sharing we have to also check the integ...
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Line 5, column 296, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... share it with all my relatives which I wouldnt be comfortable with. Also It wouldnt be...
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Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...es which I wouldnt be comfortable with. Also It wouldnt be of much help for the pati...
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Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... I wouldnt be comfortable with. Also It wouldnt be of much help for the patient to exam...
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Line 5, column 436, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...t of the doctor because in todays world its not a rocket science to create a false ...
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Line 7, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...ion to prove his competent. Some may argue that this is best means through which w...
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Line 7, column 168, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hich can be used. A doctor with years of experience in treating the medical condi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, so, well, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 350.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99142857143 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45050432127 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505714285714 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.5104018429 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9473684211 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4210526316 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57894736842 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36055439889 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125391812819 0.0831039109588 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123779276803 0.0758088955206 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256218578431 0.150359130593 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123808685896 0.0667264976115 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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