An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor's record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would not be advantageous and explain how examples shape your position.
The issue of whether or not pateints should see their doctors' records of other patients who share the same illness is a contentious one. While each side has its strenghts and weaknesses, I believe that patients should'nt have access to such information since that would break the trust code between the doctor and his patient. Also, this information may not help since every patient needs different treatments based on his or her specific condition.
To begin, the information that a doctor has of his or her patients is considered privacy; therefore, showing this data to other people without the permision of the owner would create a an abyss in the relashionship between the doctor and the patient; it may even lead the doctor to lose his career.
Adding to that, patients differ in thier biological structure and reaction to treatment. Thus, each patient needs a particualr treatment that would work best for him or her. Imagine you are having a headache, most people would recommend an asprine for you to take, but what if you didn't have a simple headache, what then? Doctors advice people to check with their doctors first before taking any midicine.
Some people may argue that having access to other similar patients could be helpful in reducing the fear a patient has. When people feel that they are not alone in all this, they will reject the fear inside them, and start to develop a sence that they belong to a bigger group. Also, seeing good results in other patients' records will help increase the hope. However, seeing such results will build flase hopes since what worked for someone may not work others. Also, seeing bad reasults will engender dispear and sadness
In summary, I think people should respect the privacy of others, and work with their doctors to find the cure that would work for them. In addition, invading other patients' records will only cause more confusion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
The issue of whether or not pateints should see their doctors'...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 184, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...the permision of the owner would create a an abyss in the relashionship between t...
^
Line 3, column 184, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'an' is left.
Suggestion: a; an
...the permision of the owner would create a an abyss in the relashionship between the ...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in summary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.236559139785 0.240241500013 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.153225806452 0.157235817809 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0591397849462 0.0880659088768 67% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0430107526882 0.0497285424764 86% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0618279569892 0.0444667217837 139% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0940860215054 0.12292977631 77% => OK
Participles: 0.0322580645161 0.0406280797675 79% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.52101426109 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0322580645161 0.030933414821 104% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0994623655914 0.0997080785238 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0483870967742 0.0249443105267 194% => Try to use less modal verbs (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0188172043011 0.0148568991511 127% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1930.0 2732.02544248 71% => OK
No of words: 322.0 452.878318584 71% => More words wanted.
Chars per words: 5.99378881988 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.58838876751 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.344720496894 0.366273622748 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.242236024845 0.280924506359 86% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.145962732919 0.200843997647 73% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0900621118012 0.132149295362 68% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52101426109 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 219.290929204 82% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55900621118 0.48968727796 114% => OK
Word variations: 60.1756126884 55.4138127331 109% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6194690265 68% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.380412469 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2156212153 59.4972553346 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.857142857 141.124799967 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 23.380412469 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.674092028746 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 47.2236024845 51.4728631049 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.40625 1.64882698954 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37826039157 0.391690518653 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.107247807421 0.123202303941 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0511268201747 0.077325440228 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.521133516708 0.547984918172 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.171709820496 0.149214159877 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136858385979 0.161403998019 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0984666276435 0.0892212321368 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.267085276694 0.385218514788 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.112976001624 0.0692045440612 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239437699889 0.275328986314 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109960748005 0.0653680567796 168% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.4325221239 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 7.22455752212 55% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 13.5995575221 74% => OK
---------------------
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6