All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Every children has special childhood that is not repeatable and Companying your own children to grownup is the wonderful thing for all parents in the world, I totally agree with the statement that being a volunteer in school is the responsibility for all parents for the following two reasons.
First of all, all parents should participate in the childhood of their children. In fact, in my country, the working hour of the adult is extremely long, and most of the children spend half of their day in school, and they go to calm school after school. There is no time for family gathering. So how do the parent share their time with their children? It is a must for them to involve in their school activities. For instance, I love to read and my mother volunteer to my school library counter when I was kid. That is the way she participate my childhood. Further more, research consistently shows that it is positive for children to develop creativity and shape personality with their parents company.
Second, all parents should volunteer in children's schools for safety reason. We all know that, based on government policy, schools are wide-opened to the public for the local residents to share the resource in school, such as recreation center or parking lot. However, in the reality, it comes out the safety concern in school. To be specific, there are more than three tragedies about criminals shot kids in their elementary schools. The complex world now is full of kidnapping, killing, hurting those little children. With adults around school makes them safer.
In conclusion, I strongly agree with the claims that it is a necessity for parents volunteer time to their children's schools, not only to company them, but also to protect them from criminals. Children are the potential foundation of our country; we should do everything that is beneficial to them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
Every children has special childhood that is ...
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Line 1, column 16, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'have', 'haven'.
Suggestion: have; haven
Every children has special childhood that is not repeatabl...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rents for the following two reasons. First of all, all parents should partic...
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Line 4, column 534, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'participates'.
Suggestion: participates
...ter when I was kid. That is the way she participate my childhood. Further more, research co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1563.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 315.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9619047619 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68890200705 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 704.065955056 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 66.2074437321 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9411764706 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5294117647 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291809001026 0.243740707755 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985078808065 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681522825266 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190475110009 0.150359130593 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324164089013 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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