Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The plan of government's funding is a controversial topic which people often debate for. Some groups of people insist that the aesthetic fields should accept more funding from the government because they can preserve culture. Other groups of people believe that athletes should receive more support from the government since the sport competition can increase the national identity. In my perspective, I prefer the later option based on the following reasons.
First of all, the advance in sport competitions can enhance the national identity of the country and break the barriers of the past. For example, people in my countries used to fight and even divide into groups since our nation is composed of several different cultures. Surprisingly, the state-sponsored athlete in my country once got into the final in the Olympic game of Badminton, and I remembered that the citizens in our nation gathered together to cheer for our national team even if the citizens conflicted because of their skin color and accents. Furthermore, people united due to the confidence of winning in sport competition. Gradually, they identified each other as a member of our nation.
Second, the popularity of exercising can enhance the health status of citizens which is the most pivotal thing to nations. To be more specific, if the government advocates the importance of specific sport, there must be more national constructions on related sport centers or facilities. As a result, not only the athletes can be trained in better venues, but also the citizens can exercise there. The more the people exercise, the healthier they would become.
To sum up, it is beneficial for providing sponsorship to sport industry. As above mentioned, the citizens can increase their national identities and enhance their health status because of the advocations of sports from government. That is the reason why I strongly agree the statements in the prompt.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 244, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
... groups since our nation is composed of several different cultures. Surprisingly, the state-spons...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, for example, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27508090615 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8798407027 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540453074434 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9052806545 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.875 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3125 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123880458906 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0404498097843 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482639435838 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0741763225077 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386389345958 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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