Do you agree or disagree with the following statement If people have the opportunity to get a secure job they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The prompt states that if people have a chance to get a secure job, they should accept it instead of waiting for the job they would be more satisfied. I partially agree with the statements by the following two reasons.

First of all, it is human being's desire to pursue their dream jobs, and we should not break their expectations. To be specific, if people are satisfied with their job, their performance would be better. Moreover, the company can gain more benefit because of the excellence of its employees. For example, as an information technology major, it is a honor to work in the information technology lab in our country. Once I grabbed a opportunity to intern in the lab, I was extremely excited and endeavor to develop an innovative application during my internship. It is the satisfaction in my mind encourages me to achieve the goal of my career.

Nevertheless, people with financial issues should take a secure job right away to maintain the daily basis of their lives. In other words, if someone have the difficulties on money, he or she should face the reality to work for salary rather than dreams. For instance, one of my friends who dreams to become a singer somehow had financial problem in his family. His parents and siblings was starving and searching for their next meal everyday. Once he got a opportunity to work as an engineer in a large firm, he accepted it right away. Since the basic needs of living should be the first priority to accomplish, he chose to work for living.

In conclusion, people should depend on their situation to decide whether to accept a secure job or expect for the dream's one. Thus, I partially agree with the statements that people should accept a secure job rather than the one they expected based on certain circumstances

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... an information technology major, it is a honor to work in the information techno...
^
Line 3, column 428, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...logy lab in our country. Once I grabbed a opportunity to intern in the lab, I was...
^
Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...their lives. In other words, if someone have the difficulties on money, he or she sh...
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Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...rving and searching for their next meal everyday. Once he got a opportunity to work as a...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 457, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...r their next meal everyday. Once he got a opportunity to work as an engineer in a...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76774193548 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73521757681 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541935483871 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.0149955027 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.375 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37013227807 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115600423011 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110336049657 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257197453787 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115890989711 0.0645574589148 180% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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