Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The prompt states that the governments should invest more on the art industry rather than the sports industry. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the statement based on two following reasons.
First of all, the sport competition can increase the identification of the nations by gathering citizens' minds. For example, during the 2016 Olympic games, the athlete Miss. Dai, who is one of the most talented badminton players from my country, defeated the players from India. I remembered that the crowds on the streets yelled out loud with joy by the victory of our nations. The next day, the great news of the badminton game was splashed across the headline of the newspapers. As a result, the positive impact from sport competitions can truly enhance the atmosphere in a country.
Second, the encouragement of athletics can increase the interest of sport, and in turn enhance the health status of citizens. Take annual swimming activity in Sun Moon Lake, Taiwan as an example. The government in our country financially supports the annual activity, which attracts more that 10 thousands of people to swim together during that day. The citizens who successfully swim across the lake can get specific certifications, and the certifications can be viewed as a great honor and must-do event from the locals. Moreover, the support from the government increases the willingness of doing sports. The more the citizens exercise, the healthier they can be.
In conclusion, although art can bring some positive feedback to the country in certain circumstances, such as the improvement of aesthetics. However, the benefits from supporting the sports industry can be far beyond the art industry, such as the community cohesion and the health benefits to the citizens. That are the reasons why I strongly disagree with the statement that the investment in art is more appropriate to the sports.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '10 thousand'.
Suggestion: 10 thousand
...nual activity, which attracts more that 10 thousands of people to swim together during that day...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, second, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 43.0788530466 32% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17263843648 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87612005089 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550488599349 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 13.0 3.08781362007 421% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9215277534 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4117647059 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0588235294 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213911305357 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06690047648 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670654699169 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142660379442 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734876827363 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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