Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
When we turn our head and compare how classroom looked decades ago with the classroom students go now, it is a great difference. In fact, the mission is for students to learn and this does not seem to have changed. The prompt recommends that even though methods of schools to instruct students are improved, too much technology is more distracting to real learning. In my opinion I disagree with this concern and argue that technology helps for two reasons.
First of all, technology has made everything easy because it saves time and is so effective in quickly distributing instructions. For instance, teachers have stopped giving notes and writing on boards because now they have the smart technology display and share information with everyone and wherever the students are. Consequently, students do not have to always be in class with books, carrying them around and above all taking notes which used to take most of their time. However, books are still basic, technology enhances learning by offering loads or different alternative information regarding something. For example, kindergartners sometimes have to do animal research. Their favorite part was the video of their animal along with fun facts which we found in internet. The above example illustrates that people can learn so many things just looking at their phone on their way to the park, or laying down on a sofa.
Further, even if we assume that schools may survive without internet, computers or technology, they are going to be isolated from the world. Technology is the bridge that makes possible connections which are vital for the education of the new generation. For example, through websites, forums and shared documents students and especially teachers do collaborative work which is productive and essential for success. Consequently, teachers use internet to upload stuff which saves them time and keeps them in current with the latest information. In addition, there are different reading and writing recourses or apps that gives an additional alternative to students to read or write on their own, like ‘Raz kids,’’British Council’ ,etc. Teachers are the facilitators of these and they have a chance to see if students are profiting and progressing. In other words, technology in schools is like a wide road system that helps school function better.
Of course, some argue that students are not getting the real learning, but they do not realize that not only books do this. However, isn’t that precisely why today’s learning is more convenient? Today students learn individually, in groups and get instructed effectively. In this globalized world they are more prepared to put themselves where they feel is the best for them. Technology opens many doors to success as long as we know to walk toward them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, still, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, of course, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2355.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 454.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1872246696 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83514061004 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570484581498 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1484026371 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.391304348 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7391304348 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.60869565217 5.21951772744 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251607021602 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691372197907 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421659888114 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14927967657 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446832298263 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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