In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being influenced by the first achievement in the field.
Success in any field of interest may be influenced by a myriad of factors. The argument states that past achievement is definitely one of the factors, undermining other factors, which have their unique effects. I mostly disagree with the argument, as throughout history, we have seen that people had made some unprecedented achievements in all fields such as science, technology, art music, etc. However, there are certainly some influences of the past achievements on people's work in some cases.
Our curious and inquisitive mind has always come up with new ideas, ideas that people have never seen before. So unique and diverse from the prevailing idea that some people were reluctant to believe them when they were first introduced. For example, from Newton’s time and around 400 years after that, Newtonian physics was the most influential form of physics that were widely accepted. People were trying to solve different problems of physics using laws discovered by Newton and his contemporaries and failed in some cases. Then it was Einstein who came up with the idea of relativity which was completely different from what our idea about physics and how physical world acts was. There was no chance that relativity and quantam physics were influenced by past discoveries as there were no such discoveries in the first place. We can see these kind of achievements in tech world also. when Steve jobs first introduced Iphone in 2007 people were astonished as they haven’t seen anything like this before. There were Nokia,Blackberry before Iphone but they were primitive compared compared to Iphone. Iphone set an standard for smartphone that was entirely a new concept.
However, in some cases past achievement may influence future work as some people are afraid to think out of the box,thinking that people will not embrace new concepts and have very little chance of being successful. For instance , when Russia sent their first space craft ‘Sputnik’ in the space ,this influenced US greatly and they also started sending out spacecrafts even humans into the space ,which eventually led to moon landing, which was one of the greatest achievement of human and science.
Even today, India,China,Japan repeatedly sending space probes to space,moon even on mars,all of which started with Soviet Union’s endeavor to explore space. If Soviet Union didn’t start their first space travel, achievements we see today,in the field of space research might not come this far, maybe who knows we would have been 50 years behind.
There are some phenomenon that propel one’s endeavor in new invention and discovery. These factors encompasses a wide range of topic such as competition,dire need to solve some real world problem, economical achievements or just that some people love to think about new ideas as we are curious by nature. Past influences certainly plays some role but it is not the only catalyst. So attributing all credits to past influences in developing something new limits the arguments persuasiveness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, in some cases, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2588.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 487.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31416837782 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92386295336 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537987679671 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 801.0 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6520480252 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.636363636 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1363636364 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 34.0 7.80617977528 436% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154661145366 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502781588151 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547966445339 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0943356836174 0.150359130593 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413309926093 0.0667264976115 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.