Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Education is one of the most important rights of human beings. Education is supposed to free our minds, create new ideas and make us complete as rational human beings. In this era, education also plays a vital role in securing a successful career and therefore needed to have a bright future. But education for the sake of career and money only may sometimes make our mind confined and work against the very goal it tries to satisfy which is to broaden our intellect. So I strongly agree with the argument that formal education restricts our minds and spirits. Education should be universal and people should be allowed to educate themselves in which they find interest. And sometimes formal education may destroy someone's potential unknowingly while it is still in the bud.
As we see the history of mankind, we see that most of the great talents of the times were mostly self-taught. Formal education did little to nothing in making of those great minds. For instance, Thomas Alva Edison who was one of the greatest inventors of all time indebted us with many scientific inventions like the light bulb, gramophone, dc current and thousands many others, were kicked out of school for being dull. His teachers thought he was not good for anything and he had no future. He didn't fail school actually, it was the formal education system that failed him. If he was like other kids in the school, passing exams, getting into universities, getting a job like millions of other people, then who knows, maybe we would never have a great inventor like him. He became successful because he managed to get out of the system early. Focusing on things of his love rather than following the age-old system of so-called education made him the wizard of Menlo Park. Again when we see in recent times, billionaire and innovator like steve jobs, Mark Zuckerberg these people were either never went to college or dropped out of universities. Their passion and love for what they do make them successful not the traditional education system. The mundane education system may produce skilled workers, law-abiding citizens but to produce leaders, out of the box thinkers it does almost nothing as it is practical life lessons which widen our minds and makes us pragmatic.
The Formal education system may sometimes work against how our mind works. Our mind works best when we think freely and there is no pressure upon us to be successful. Education should be a walk in the park rather than a tedious race in which winning is the ultimate goal. The present education system seems more like the race where only who wins will have a better life and the looser will embrace an ill fate. This kind of unhealthy race restricts our mind and makes us more like a machine. Most of the students are forced to go through the same curriculum whatever their talent and interest lie in. Some are lucky as their field of interests matches the subjects they are forced to study but not all of them have the same fate. Some people study subjects for years after years which disgusts them without knowing their true potential. Maybe the could-have-been artist is working in our office, doing normal desk jobs, where his true potential might never be revealed. Maybe we are losing the next Einstein or Picasso in the process of educating people in a categorical manner.
Some people may argue that it is not possible to design an education system which is ideal for all and it is not also possible to educate everyone individually according to the need. But here the point is, what people actually need is a free space to flower their true potential
rather than a conducive environment. Yes, it is true that an ideal environment may be of great help, but it may be a hard nut to crack to adopt a system that is conducive to everyone. So for the time being, creating some space for self-understanding, thereby reducing the tight regiment of the formal education system may be of great help.
Education designed to make our minds hungry for more knowledge and a new idea. Using education just as a tool for success(which is what formal education actually is) may work in reverse. Success should not be the ultimate goal of education. If we let education
do its job, then success will follow inevitably.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, while, for instance, kind of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 40.0 19.5258426966 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 33.0505617978 203% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3559.0 2235.4752809 159% => OK
No of words: 739.0 442.535393258 167% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81596752368 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.21388093824 4.55969084622 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54622378087 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 347.0 215.323595506 161% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469553450609 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 1116.0 704.065955056 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.2370786517 178% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5890356339 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8611111111 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5277777778 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.72222222222 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 26.0 10.2758426966 253% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240342927413 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700186643056 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585598203366 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123108799609 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0753624108022 0.0667264976115 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 100.480337079 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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