In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Several scientific discoveries and famous contributions are achieved after years and years of study and devotion to a unique field. Many people, actually, argue that this influence along with the accumulation of specific knowledge is exactly what one needs to make futher significant achievements. However, what these people fail to consider is that things are interconected and because of this there is an enormous chance of contributing to an area even not being recognized as an expert on it. Recently, examples in the field of science and technology supports the claim that one can be make successful accomplishments in a area without having strong past influences on it.
Science is a good example of this. People that graduate in a given field may decided to do research in another one and then become great scholars. What is even more interesting is that research in a specific field can significantly contribute in another one. This is the ‘butterfly effect of science’. An example of this is a work that two Brazilian professors did for the Brazilian policy through the analysis of cocaine samples. These academics helped in the dentification of possible locations from which this drug was being distributed. Hence, although they never had any experience in this type of investigation whatsoever, these scholars, who usually conduct research in a completely differen field, were good ‘investigators’ for the Brazilian police.
Furthermore, technological applications are also an example about how creavity and knowledge has no borders. Also in Brazil, ‘startup’ firms are helping in the development of medical solutions for people with disabilities. The expertise of programmers and software developers made possible the creation of tablet and smartphone applications for people with voice problems. Because of the work of these engineers and computer scientists combined with the input of physicians and nurses, people that have access to these applications can communicate more effectively and be execute their daily tasks more easly. Hence, although the developers had no experience and no past achievements in the field of medicine, they were able to support professionals in other field to better treat their patients.
In conclusion, although aspects like experience, mastery in a given field and recognition by past achievements are usually inherent to significant contributions, they are not the only thing that matter. The examples discussed showed how expertise and dedication to a complete different area may be useful to promote solutions and accomplishing substantial achievements in other field. Therefore, the interconection of knowledge should be taken into more consideration. Perhaps, if people from diverse areas collaborate more we may benefit from more substantial contributions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 431.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61484918794 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.43545928198 2.79657885939 123% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5313225058 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6404697966 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.55 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192495767232 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567231155981 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051032117183 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119533803442 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401773215287 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 48.8420337079 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.1639044944 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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