Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.

Essay topics:

Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.

Your task

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

Sponsoring artists and disseminating their work in museums is something that has been done for a long time. Museums in Latin America, Europe and North America are examples of successful government funding allocated to the development and the popularization or arts. Furthermore, many artists receive financial support by either the government or wealthy patrons to work. However, while many people argue that such practice is welcomed and necessay, other people believe that this type of help, actually, threatens the creativity and, therefore, the whole integrity of arts. Although opinions diverge, no one can argue that the financial support that artists receive allows them to be completely dedicated to art, contributing, therefore, to the creation of original and maginificent pieces.

As mentioned, artistic sponsors exist for a long time and although they may have a particular interest in the work of a specific artist, they play an important role in providing conditions so that the artist can be only concetrated in the development of his or her work. In an opposite scenario, the artist would have to pursue another way of living, consequently, jeopardizing the time that should be dedicated to the development of his or her art. Therefore, patronizing an artist is something of a unique importance, specially for a prfessional artist that struggle in selling his or her work.

Furthermore, the construction of Museums and art schools are another ways in which governments used to invest. For instance, the São Paulo Art Museum and the Oscar Niemeyer Museu were created through public funding and are considered some of the most important cultural attractions for tourism in Latin America. Also in Brazil, there are art schools there were created with the purpose of exerting a social role by taking children out of the streets and teaching arts to them. Because of social projects like this, Brazilian rates of criminality were reduced and also several young Brazilian artists are working on their performances all over the world.

In conclusion, the examples discussed show how important is for the development of arts to receive financial support. Although many people, including artists, claim that such a type of motivation put at risk the integrity of artistic creations, it is a fact that through funding many artists are able to survive by their work. Also, I believe that if more people give importance by to arts and, perhaps support financial aid to arts, more museum could be created and more people could be educated to become professional artists on the future.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 75, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an example' or simply 'examples'?
Suggestion: an example; examples
...in America, Europe and North America is an examples of successful government funding alloca...
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Line 3, column 560, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... specially for a prfessional artist that struggle in selling his or her work. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, consequently, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2148.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 416.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16346153846 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88522028914 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509615384615 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4027136888 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.2 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7333333333 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 5.21951772744 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22721370048 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794447748332 0.0831039109588 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573575158183 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146527362213 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582865528969 0.0667264976115 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.1392134831 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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