In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
It’s true that an enterprise needs some achievements to make a consequential contribution, but it’s not impossible without these achievements. I would strongly disagree with the above statement because for two reasons.
Firstly, an enterprise needs investment and courage to take the risk of achieving a goal. Though it’s important to have a background success in that field, it’s still plausible. For example, take Apple for contributing such innovation that the company’s revenue now is one trillion dollars, and is sitting on the top of the stack in terms of sales. It was first started by Steve Jobs and his friend, who had neither experience nor budget. Having no little experience, they surmounted the difficulties and were successful.
Google was started in a garage and now it is the most renowned search engine in the entire world. It was an instant success when it bought YouTube. Google achieved global success when an employee sold his idea of Electronic Email to the company. It then launched Google chrome which merely increased its revenue. Google is now preparing to offer services in China. An enterprise needs tactics and strategies to contribute and develop, but not past achievements.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the above statement. One would say that achievement is important for success but being discrete would always help in achieving bigger things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ways help in achieving bigger things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, so, still, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 58.6224719101 43% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1199.0 2235.4752809 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 223.0 442.535393258 50% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37668161435 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 4.55969084622 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99383025004 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 215.323595506 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618834080717 0.4932671777 125% => OK
syllable_count: 360.0 704.065955056 51% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6511515405 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.9333333333 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8666666667 23.4991977007 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53333333333 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151093923971 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490018355451 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498678364743 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099916851557 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474246461194 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.1743820225 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.33 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 100.480337079 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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