In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take.
In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations
shape your position.
The author contends, in order to provide a significant contribution to any of the endeavor, a person should have achieved something remarkable in that particular field. Only then can a person contribute significantly to its area, otherwise it is not possible. In my opinion, the author has placed a very strong view by using the word
impossible in his argument stem, to which I completely disagree. The premises for my stand is pervasive all over the essay, where an elaborate picture has been presented.
There are various flaws in the argument presented. Firstly, the author says that the past achievements should be within the field where a person is looking to excel. To prove this wrong, let us take the example of the great leader and former President of India, Dr. A.P.J Abul Kalam. This great man was a scientist
who gave India its Nuclear weapon and he had absolutely no background of politics. He had an achievement but not in the same field but the contribution provided by him towards the country in uplifting India by bringing social reforms are numerous which has created respect for the great man and that respect is prevalent in every Indian citizen's heart irrespective of their religion.
Secondly, achievement could be monitory achievements or in terms of recognition, even though people who make a significant contribution are motivated by achievements but having a past achievement to provide a field something notable is not always true. Moreover, saying that it is impossible to do it without prior achievements will be
unrealistic. Illustrating this with an example of my Mathematics teacher who had come from a poor background and had no money to even finish his degree for teaching, and as he could not teach in any schools, he used to take private classes and higher secondary students from good schools used to go to him after school to learn Mathematics as he had the intelligence and tact which did not need any degree to certify. His passion and dedication for teaching did the miracle. The financial constrain and other such restrictions can be the leading factors due to which a person has not achieved something in past, but as evident it is not impossible to provide a significant contribution.
Moreover, these achievement from past can sometimes play a reverse role, instead of extending a significant contribution there are some examples where people have used the knowledge and power to harm the field they have been working in. Azzharudin, a well known Indian cricketer after gaining the fame is accused of accepting bribe for various cricket matches and was banned from playing or even prisoned for this heinous act.
Hence to conclude, it is true that any past achievements in the field a person is working for, can have an influence in the contribution it provides but saying that it is impossible to do without that will be completely wrong. There are myriad of attributes that need to be accounted if we are looking for factors that can bring considerable contribution such as individual motivation, work environment, hunger to learn more and provide best, dedication, skills and many more.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: J
... and former President of India, Dr. A.P.J Abul Kalam. This great man was a scient...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
...at respect is prevalent in every Indian citizens heart irrespective of their religion. ...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...ich a person has not achieved something in past, but as evident it is not impossible to...
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Line 10, column 11, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this achievement' or 'these achievements'?
Suggestion: this achievement; these achievements
... significant contribution. Moreover, these achievement from past can sometimes play a reverse ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... even prisoned for this heinous act. Hence to conclude, it is true that any past a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2631.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 524.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02099236641 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9228885773 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486641221374 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 823.5 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.5304668722 60.3974514979 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.166666667 118.986275619 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1111111111 23.4991977007 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 5.21951772744 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.97078651685 161% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251484008568 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829053258205 0.0831039109588 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752487026998 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117878448311 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053289691292 0.0667264976115 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.1392134831 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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