A recent study by the Center for Disease Control and Prevention found that employees with paid sick leave are 28 percent less likely to be involved in a work-related accident than employees who do not receive payment for sick leave. Researchers hypothesize that employees with unpaid sick leave feel pressured to work during time of illness for fear of lack of pay. On-the-job accidents are then spurred by impaired judgment or motor skills due to illness or illness-related medications. The highest-risk occupations, such as construction, showed the highest discrepancy between paid and unpaid leave.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to determine whether the researchers’ hypothesis is reasonable. Be sure to explain what effects the answers to these questions would have on the validity of the hypothesis.
The author concludes in his argument that an employee receiving paid leave is 28 percent less likely to encounter a work- related accident in comparison to an employee who does not get paid sick leave. Author also asserts that workers with unpaid leaves feel pressured to come to work even in the state of illness. In my opinion, unpaid leaves could be one of the reasons for the Employees to push for work during their illness but considering it as the whole and sole reason to arrive to this conclusion can be challenged and falsified in several ways.
To begin with, in the author's first sentence the figure of 28 percent is questionable as the author has not given any evidence of what was number of sample data that was taken. What if the number of people who were surveyed were as low as 5, is that figure still acceptable? No, right. If the author would have provided additional information like the huge size of sample data that was taken into consideration, then that would support his argument.
Secondly, another important parameters about which author has provided no information is the nature of the job author is talking about, has he taken all fields of work into consideration, as complexity and criticality of job does play a vital role to arrive to this conclusion. To illustrate this, lets take an example of a software professional, one who attends office while he is sick and a construction labor. There is no surprise that a small discomfort in health can cost the construction labor his life if he is unable to balance his body at the construction site and on contrary maximum what can happen to a software professional is that he may fall asleep on his desk.
Thirdly, the hypothesis that Employees with unpaid sick leave feel pressured rests on the reason that its due to the fear of lack of pay during the time of illness The premise for this argument again does not take into consideration some other factors like the role of Employee at work, it might happen that the worker is the key member in his team and the responsibilities over his head pressurize him to come to work even while he is unwell. If the author mentioned in his argument that the employee did not have a vital role in terms of his duties at work and thus no other reason to feel pressured would bolster his argument.
Fourthly, another unconvincing claim I would rather say unreliable claim that the author puts forth is that impair judgement or impaired motor skills are due to illness and illness related medications. I will elucidate this with an example to make it clear why I referred to this data as unreliable. There is a fair possibility that the workers taken in the survey are lying, probably what they are referring to illness related medications are some sort of detrimental, illegal and addictive drugs that they are consuming and going for work, that could be another reason for their impaired judgement and loss of balance at their vehicles.
Hence, to conclude the author has dismissed some of the assumptions as mentioned in the above paragraphs in order to arrive to the conclusion. If the argument was backed up with the sample size taken, the diversity of the sample data and more information on other factors like role of the employee at work mentioned in paragraph 3 etc, his argument would be strong and convincing.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 584 350
No. of Characters: 2711 1500
No. of Different Words: 249 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.916 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.642 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.619 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.353 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.442 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.62 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...g about, has he taken all fields of work into consideration, as complexity and cr...
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...fort in health can cost the construction labor his life if he is unable to balanc...
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...oftware professional is that he may fall asleep on his desk. Thirdly, the hypo...
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...work, it might happen that the worker is the key member in his team and the respo...
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... no other reason to feel pressured would bolster his argument. Fourthly, anoth...
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...dgement or impaired motor skills are due to illness and illness related medicatio...
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...ns are some sort of detrimental, illegal and addictive drugs that they are consu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, sort of, talking about, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 28.8173652695 184% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 55.5748502994 157% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2807.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 584.0 441.139720559 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80650684932 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91590194646 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67975403707 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 204.123752495 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441780821918 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 876.6 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 22.8473053892 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.499960877 57.8364921388 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 175.4375 119.503703932 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.5 23.324526521 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 5.70786347227 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 5.15768463074 446% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197701828438 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654379293673 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805187680009 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0621424758257 0.128457276422 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681271700877 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 14.3799401198 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.21 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.1389221557 147% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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