School should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation
and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and sup porting your position, be sure
to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position
The author contends that schools should emphasize more on preparing a student better on the non academic aspects of adulthood.
I totally agree with the claim asserted by the author and would like to rest my stand on numerous grounds that have been discussed below.
Good academics is definitely a safety net for an individual to buy bread and butter for himself and his family, but is a human life all about survival?
Even animals do that without any schooling, so what makes us different than them is a very important aspect schools should stress upon and provide required guidance to the
students.
First and foremost, a very important difference one needs to understand is the difference between Literacy and Education. The schools should give emphasis
on educating the students about morals and principles which are an important aspect to a human life. To explicate this point let us take an example of
a Harward Graduate who is very successful academically but harasses his female peers sexually, what is the meaning of his degree when the basic sense of
respect is missing.
Secondly, when we talk about preparing students for non academic aspects, apart from building a good character in the students, certain self defense
training should also be considered. These skills can be life saving for a person in certain situation and "two plus two equals four" cannot do anything in this scenario.
Schools should initiate awareness programs about self defense strategies for the benefit of the child. After all what is more precious than life itself!
Thirdly, the biggest problem current generation is facing these days is depression, anxiety, mental stress due to various reasons like family pressure, heartbreaks
and others.In schools, apart from providing councilors students can be taught to meditate where one develops the practice of contemplation and can handle the stress in a better way.
Additionally, other artistic skills like singing, dancing, sports, and other extra curricular activities boosts up the confidence level of a person and helps in the overall development.
All the points mentioned above strongly allude that preparing a student for other basic yet important aspects of life like building a good character, having the right
attitude towards various hardships one faces as a part of growing up in life is extremely essential and thus should not be neglected by any schools or institutes imparting
education as a whole.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, after all, apart from, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2104.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 397.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29974811083 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71867423378 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581863979849 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.5771819362 60.3974514979 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.846153846 118.986275619 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5384615385 23.4991977007 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76923076923 5.21951772744 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 16.0 4.97078651685 322% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216761061084 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816737500686 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655816261607 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0682301846641 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606325858614 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.1392134831 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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