Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Lush green forests, natural reserves, lively rivers and balance of various zoological species is one of the major concern of our present day world. Programmes for the conservation of wildlife species have been taken up by many organizations for a sustainable future. With the growing population and the emerging needs of people, the wilderness is being recklessly destroyed and our ecosystem left disturbed. The author contends that a law should be reinforced to preserve any kind of the small patches of wilderness areas, which definitely is the need of an hour, even though these areas are suitable for development and ultimately provide economic gains. There are various premises on which my opinion is based and are pervasive in the entire passage.
Starting with the basic need of any life to exist on this planet which is in the form of oxygen gas, which every human is well aware is not synthesised in our body, rather our lungs are hanging on those tress which we are slaughtering down without giving it a second thought. Any human, is out in the race to satisfy their greed. Papers, furnitures, fuel, luxury items are some of the items which we put this wood for use and completely ignore the basic fact, while doing so we are impairing our own self. This has significantly provided a breeding ground for other other environmental issue to mushroom.
Moving on the animal kingdom, where human is using every creatures life for their own benefits, snakes, crocodiles,ostrich their leather is being used to make branded bags, shoes, home decorations. Manufacturing these items have become so fanciful that once again we ignore the balance of nature and disrupt it in every possible way. Since so many years when hunting was legal and was considered as a skill and leisure activity, we were at the verge of losing lions, elephants and so many more species which have become endangered now. It was only after the hunting was banned and various programmes initiated by the government that forests could revive back and the count of these species is improving, though not stable yet.
Moreover, what we call as economic gains like building industries, residential colonies, roads, dams and others, we are creating havoc with the nature by changing the course of rivers, trying to control its flow by building dams, polluting them with the wastes. If these "so called" development projects keep rising at the cost of injuring our ecosystem, the day is not far when we all will fall a prey to the natural calamities and everything will be devastated. Hence to conclude, any laws or restriction implemented on saving our wilderness areas will be beneficial, in fact every country should not just preserve these homes of wild but also create more by planting trees. Government should keep aside notable funds to increase awareness about our changing ecology and to implement effective measures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tions for a sustainable future. With the growing population and the emerging need...
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Line 4, column 198, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this tress' or 'those tresses'?
Suggestion: this tress; those tresses
...r body, rather our lungs are hanging on those tress which we are slaughtering down without ...
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Line 4, column 374, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ers, furnitures, fuel, luxury items are some of the items which we put this wood for use an...
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Line 4, column 561, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: other
...ficantly provided a breeding ground for other other environmental issue to mushroom. Mov...
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Line 6, column 58, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'creatures'' or 'creature's'?
Suggestion: creatures'; creature's
...mal kingdom, where human is using every creatures life for their own benefits, snakes, cr...
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Line 6, column 115, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ostrich
...r their own benefits, snakes, crocodiles,ostrich their leather is being used to make bra...
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Line 8, column 475, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ties and everything will be devastated. Hence to conclude, any laws or restriction im...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, second, so, well, while, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2433.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 482.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04771784232 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71266889074 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580912863071 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.4908983974 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.117647059 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3529411765 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29411764706 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21764212679 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665372571815 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648698632684 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130339870265 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584368525411 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.