"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author contends, in order to reduce the number of moped accidents in Balmar island the town council should put a constraint on the number of mopeds rented, from 50 to 25 per day. The author has also bolstered his claim with the supporting data from a neighboring island of Seaville where similar limit on moped rentals helped them achieve the reduction in the moped accidents last year. However, the premise on which this assertion is made is incomplete and insufficient and requires further plumbing to arrive to this conclusion. There are various aspects one needs to consider before the implementation of a policy just because it is successful to curb the issue under different conditions doesn't not imply it will be successful everywhere.
First and foremost the town council should take a look at the population size of the neighboring town where this policy was successful. It is possible that Seaville's population is very less in comparison to Balmer island because, its given in the data that the population in Balmar increases to 100,000 during summer but the population for Seaville is not mentioned. If the population is huge for that island then restricting the number of mopeds may cause additional problems. People will find some other viable option to commute, possible rental cars, which may cause a concern for city traffic police and also cause chaos on the roads which ultimately increase the chances of accidents involving pedestrians and four wheeler this time. To elucidate this, let us take the case of Poland where population is very less and government is able to provide free medical to all at the cost of a low insurance amount paid by everyone every year but this policy can not be implemented in India having a large population base as it suffers from poverty, illiteracy and other challenges which restricts it.
Secondly, if it is a tourist destination, the revenue generated by the tourism can fall significantly if the area of the island is huge and moped services are cut down. The city council should take a look at this side of the picture too before putting a restriction on the moped companies. This restriction can greatly have an impact on the locals whose only source of income could be renting out their mopeds.
Considering the inconvenience caused to the tourists, impact on the revenue of the island and the locals the government should invest some time and efforts looking at the broader picture before implementing this policy. They can come up with an alternative to this proposal which does not have the limitations like this one. Hence, the council should take a decision only after the thorough investigation.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 448 350
No. of Characters: 2189 1500
No. of Different Words: 232 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.601 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.886 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.694 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.867 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.339 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.541 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 209, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...rb the issue under different conditions doesnt not imply it will be successful everywh...
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Line 4, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...population is very less in comparison to Balmer island because, its given in the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2229.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 447.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98657718121 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73967663526 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525727069351 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.8215284281 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.6 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8 23.324526521 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264236926462 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919533599044 0.0743258471296 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0864913520825 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122961919084 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104107936354 0.0628817314937 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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