"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to improve Hopewell's economy—and generate additional tax revenues—is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author, in the argument given contends that the best way to improve Hopewell's economy is to devise the method used by the nearby town due to the positive benefits this town was able to reap after implementing it. However, this assertion is based on insufficient information and hence is weak and not persuasive. The premises for my stand are pervasive throughout the passage.
Firstly, the location f this town "Ocean View" must be considered and analyzed thoroughly because there is a possiblity thet this area had a potential for tourism and that may not be the case with Hopewell, building a hotel and investing the money on constructing golf course can prove to be a loss if its is not well suited for tourism or the financial status of the locals is weak. These are the primary factors to be taken into consideration.
Secondly, the author has presented a fact that since two years te tourism has increased but more insightful investigation needs to be done on this point, whether this increase in tourism is solely due to these two new constructions or there are any other reasons for new businesses to be opened. It could be that the laws for entrepreneurship in this area have been given flexibility which in turn has resulted in this improvement. Moreover, the author is talking about the increase in tax revenues of the city which implies that the city is receiving more taxes which could be again due to several reasons like the revision in tax rates that the municipality has implemented. Moreover, it has been only two years time frame that new business is set up, a long term sustainability needs to be checked before suggesting this policy to others.
Thirdly, the most important observation is that even if we consider the resort hotel and muncipal golf course as the reasons for all of these positive developments in Ocean view, still the authority needs to dwell into the criterias like how far Ocean view is from Hopewell, what is the population of these towns because if the distance and the population is limited and Ocean view is better ground for tourism, then this plan is a major flop. Another perspective to look at will be , that another golf course and resort can bring in unwanted competition to both the towns, possibly bringing the revenue of Ocean view down as well. We have seen it in the other markets like electronics, mobile network providers and others, the business becomes tough when the competetion rises. Instead of devising the same mothod, hopewell should look fr other innovative alternative to flourish.
Therefore, to conclude my view, the author's argument is weak and easily challenged because its premises are not firm and cogent. Any insightful investigation of the issue is lacking which makes the argument easily attackable.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Thirdly, the most important observation is that even if we consider the resort hotel and muncipal golf course as the reasons for all of these positive developments in Ocean view, still the authority needs to dwell into the criterias like how far Ocean view is from Hopewell, what is the population of these towns because if the distance and the population is limited and Ocean view is better ground for tourism, then this plan is a major flop.
Error: criterias Suggestion: criteria
Error: muncipal Suggestion: municipal
Sentence: We have seen it in the other markets like electronics, mobile network providers and others, the business becomes tough when the competetion rises.
Error: competetion Suggestion: competition
Sentence: Instead of devising the same mothod, hopewell should look fr other innovative alternative to flourish.
Error: hopewell Suggestion: hopeless
Error: fr Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: mothod Suggestion: method
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 472 350
No. of Characters: 2268 1500
No. of Different Words: 245 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.661 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.805 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.711 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.376 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.58 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 678, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Two successive sentences begin with the same adverb. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... that the municipality has implemented. Moreover, it has been only two years time frame ...
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Line 7, column 483, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
.... Another perspective to look at will be , that another golf course and resort can...
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Line 7, column 607, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... towns, possibly bringing the revenue of Ocean view down as well. We have seen it...
^^
Line 9, column 37, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... Therefore, to conclude my view, the authors argument is weak and easily challenged ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, third, thirdly, well, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2329.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 472.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9343220339 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79772003901 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 204.123752495 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527542372881 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.573115041 57.8364921388 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.266666667 119.503703932 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.4666666667 23.324526521 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 5.70786347227 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2526265787 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066556973704 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691397847987 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117063088747 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832701819845 0.0628817314937 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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