Schools should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and sup porting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Since the early days schools have mainly focused on the academics because it was assumed that the rest of the information need to become a functioning adult will be taught by the family and the community. However, with the rise in globalization and the market in general, we have lost the tightly knit communities and children graduate with imperfect knowledge to tackle the world. Schools should now step up to this challenge and expand their definition of education to incorporate many more disciplines.
An adult needs a vast amount of knowledge of various topics to thrive in the current world and one of the most basic ingredient in the economic soup is money. Every individual must know what is money, where does it come from, how debt works or how the society in general generates wealth. This information is generally reserved for individuals who opt into the academics pertaining to economics and the general populous is unaware about it. Schools should keep basic economics a must for every student to keep them competitive in this fast paced world. However, it may be argued that the student, if he/she shows interest in this field will elect it on their own but that will still alienate vast majority of others who aren't interested enough to devote their whole academic career into it.
Any successful individual will credit their success to not only their hard work but also to others who help them climb up the success ladder. To be able to socialise and create a network is a very valuable skill to have. Unfortunately not many have this innate talent but it can be grown and groomed overtime. People who lack this skill and don't know how to develop it will hamper their rise in the corporate ladder. If schools taught young malleable minds on how to network and polish their social skills, we will have many more success stories. This could even be in favour of the school as now the school will have more successful alumnis to boast about.
Today more and more people are dying not because of any violence or wars but by losing the battle to their own minds. A lot of cases of mental depression goes unnoticed because people just don't know how to identify them. Teaching students on how to identify and help such individuals may prevent a large number of unnecessary deaths. Mentally unstable individuals in the recent times have gone rouge and have caused mass shootings even in schools. Educational institutions like schools should support this to make them a safe place to study.
With the dawn of the 21st century, the communities that helped in grooming children have slowly withered away. This new generation of students are now on their own to fend for themselves in this ruthless world. Schools should now capitalise on the opportunity and guide this young and talented individuals and fill in the gaps of the information left by the lack of any proper grooming by the parents or the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2435.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 503.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84095427435 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52246251369 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502982107356 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 761.4 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5179278757 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.681818182 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8636363636 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.27272727273 5.21951772744 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0885083937764 0.243740707755 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0302167171424 0.0831039109588 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283838399596 0.0758088955206 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0577397884828 0.150359130593 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170942676521 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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