In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
No one gainsays that great discovery or achievement in science, technology and society have brought significant changes in our life and made it more expedient and sophisticated. Some claim that regardless of area of fields, novel discovery is always derivative of the past achievements. However, there are certainly causal factors such as accident to contribute to the greatest discoveries irrelevant to the past.
one may argue that without the support of previous findings or development, people in the present time would not be able to attain breakthrough as much as it would with them. To elucidate further on this issue, Galileo Galiei can be a good example. he used telescopes invented prior to his time to observe moon, planets in the solar system, and starts in the galaxy. having had the effective tools to observe the stars, he could easily investigate the space and later on, published his new theory that the earth and planets in the solar system revolved around the sun. Another vivid example can be the story of the Wright Brothers who invented the first human controlling airplane. In their time, there were already other prototype-like aircrafts created by other inventors and got intrigued by them in dreaming up their own. All in all, these examples illustrate how previous findings and developments can influence people in the present to make great things.
Nonetheless, it cannot be denied that other determinants certainly play great roles in novel discovery. first of all, many greatest findings in the world were done by serendipity. To illustrate this, Peniciline, the first antibiotics to save numerous life from fatal bacteria diseases were circuitously found when the Penicilin-producing fungi sneaked through the open window into the culture plate of pathogenic bacteria. What’s more, Isacc Newton was having a rest in his garden when he realized the theory of gravity by accidently dropping apple on his head. they did not endeavor to refer to specific ideas or findings that were previously constructed, yet they were able to find one of the most significant discoveries.
To sum up, there are many factors that can influence the notable discoveries. While there are surely contributions of the past achievements, many cases of the greatest findings seem to be more related to accidental moments to provide new thoughts and ideas.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, while, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1990.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 381.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22309711286 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9383152279 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590551181102 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5205189674 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.058823529 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4117647059 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0950708537152 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0297829629768 0.0831039109588 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.020481365719 0.0758088955206 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0586373624453 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0104355181019 0.0667264976115 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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