Anyone can make things bigger and more complex. What requires real effort and courage is to move in the opposite direction---in other words, to make things as simple as possible
In a modern digital world, there are far more choice for us to make every day than the condition decade ago. The speaker board assert that those what we treat as huge and complicated are actually easier to handle than small or even slight things including what we consider as daily stuffs. Whether we need more effort and courage when facing the latter one? Although it is true that big things may have larger influence on our world, I mostly agree the speakers assertion. Also, additionally, the definition of big and small, in my opinion, is not immutally exclusive,
We normally consider big things including those long-term scientific research or multinational industries as super tough that normal people without deep vocational training can directly handle that. For example, scientific invention in medical fields always need experts who master this area and a variety number of different equipment before setting. Before these experts introduce any new medicine which can cure any incurable disease previously, there would absolutely be thousand of failure and sometimes year long research. In that case, we have to admit that normally pharmancy companies are extremely profitable because while they enjoy the revenue, they also put themselves into a risk condition when they do not know whether new funding can be useful or not. Governments also tend to fund these companies since they also hold a sense of social responsibility.
However, this does not mean that big things are always superior to tiny stuffs. Somethings it is even easier for these famous political leaders, scientists, entrepreneurs to make decision because they only need to wield their power to lead a roughly direction for their inferior people according to statistic data. It is relative easy for these elites who has experience and knowledge from prestigious universities, as well as complementing by their colleagues. However, when normal workers or students face competitive works, they have to put these things under careful scrutiny before moving forward. In spite of the advent of assembly lines or other industrial machines, most workers nowadays still need to assemble components by hand and they cannot make any fault. Under high pressure, they need to make more effort on their work.
Finally, I have to say when a certain thing is moving forward and making progress, we cannot just consider it as big or small. It is too obscure because behind the success, there is the effort of a big team. Now all tasks are more difficult than centuries ago, so almost it is impossible for someone to handle them be himself or herself and no one would deny the essential of cooperation or we say ‘team work’. In a term, both leaders who handle well-rounded decision and workers who make imagination into reality are equal important so it is hard for us to define which part hold much more risk or need better acceptable personality. For instance, big international technological companies including apple or microsoft have thousands of employees. Some of them target at innovation and theoretical work, while others may stay in the warehouse. Before apple really release the newest model of phone, all these employees should be treated equally,
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'speakers'' or 'speaker's'?
Suggestion: speakers'; speaker's
...luence on our world, I mostly agree the speakers assertion. Also, additionally, the defi...
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Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...e previously, there would absolutely be thousand of failure and sometimes year long rese...
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Message: You used an adverb ('roughly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('direction') instead of another adjective.
... only need to wield their power to lead a roughly direction for their inferior people according to ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ese employees should be treated equally,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, however, if, may, really, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, as well as, in my opinion, in spite of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2714.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 526.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15969581749 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73976008624 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 298.0 215.323595506 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566539923954 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 858.6 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.742483733 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.363636364 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9090909091 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173327178467 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523536583959 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440110230483 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111333555859 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395338009254 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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