The best way for a society to prepare its young people for
leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by
instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
While competition can contribute to building successful leaders in government, industry, and other fields, it is through cooperation that we can prepare young people the best. It is through cooperation that people are able to build the relationships that they need to be successful leaders, as well as allowing them to have the teamwork skills needed to be successful.
Many leaders in industry have used their cooperation skills to get to where they are. These are the skills that involve caring for other people and making sure that they are getting what they need in the relationship. This is the foundation with which many companies leaders have gained their prominence in their company. One such example is Warren Buffett. While he is incredibly good at what he does, it is through the way that he is able to work with others that has helped to lead him to success at Berkshire Hathaway. He understands that he needs to trust his partners as well as trusting the boards of the companies that he invests in. He does not assume he is able to run any given business better than their existing leadership, allowing them to not be fearful. His cooperation skills are crucial to his success in industry.
The necessity for cooperation is also shown through the prominence of teamwork skills in successful people. Teamwork is a common thread when looking at the Presidents of the United States. Many of them played sports growing up, which taught them how to work with others for the common good. One such example is Gerald Ford, who famously played collegiate football at the University of Michigan. Playing the offensive line specifically taught him how to work with four other people to achieve the goal of protecting the ball carrier. Without these skills he would not have been able to work with his cabinet as President. Cooperation is what allows people to work together to be the best that they can be.
While instilling some competitive nature in the young people can be helpful, it is cooperation that is the most important. Focusing more on competitiveness will cause the young people to try and achieve everything on their own. It is through cooperation that they will be able to learn how to work together to leverage their skills in an optimal way. Instilling cooperation at a young age will teach them how to be leaders in their future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 706, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gether to be the best that they can be. While instilling some competitive nature...
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Line 7, column 188, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...tiveness will cause the young people to try and achieve everything on their own. It is ...
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Line 7, column 333, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an optimal way" with adverb for "optimal"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... work together to leverage their skills in an optimal way. Instilling cooperation at a young age ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'still', 'well', 'while', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.200923787529 0.240241500013 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.203233256351 0.157235817809 129% => OK
Adjectives: 0.080831408776 0.0880659088768 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0369515011547 0.0497285424764 74% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0900692840647 0.0444667217837 203% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.122401847575 0.12292977631 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0484988452656 0.0406280797675 119% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.68554226524 2.79330140395 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0577367205543 0.030933414821 187% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00230946882217 0.0016655270985 139% => OK
Determiners: 0.0692840646651 0.0997080785238 69% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0184757505774 0.0249443105267 74% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0346420323326 0.0148568991511 233% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2360.0 2732.02544248 86% => OK
No of words: 403.0 452.878318584 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.85607940447 6.0361032391 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.58838876751 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.334987593052 0.366273622748 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.24317617866 0.280924506359 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.168734491315 0.200843997647 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.111662531017 0.132149295362 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68554226524 2.79330140395 96% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 219.290929204 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446650124069 0.48968727796 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.5867695192 55.4138127331 86% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6194690265 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.1904761905 23.380412469 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8545815818 59.4972553346 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.380952381 141.124799967 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1904761905 23.380412469 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.428571428571 0.674092028746 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 43.5080940565 51.4728631049 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.12587412587 1.64882698954 68% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381640608855 0.391690518653 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.151029842698 0.123202303941 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0962994148382 0.077325440228 125% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.498507041407 0.547984918172 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.147968340452 0.149214159877 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14984685872 0.161403998019 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716196854438 0.0892212321368 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.449567185256 0.385218514788 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0493725528914 0.0692045440612 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282377661535 0.275328986314 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0211781207962 0.0653680567796 32% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.30420353982 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 7.22455752212 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.5995575221 118% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.