The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership
Nowadays we seem to face a society with both more intense competition and more opportunities to cooperate. The intense competition can be attributed to the explosive of human population and limited recource. On the other hand, with the development of knowledge and technology, it is becoming less possible for any of us to be an expertise in all fields thus leading to the necessity of cooperration. Which criteria should be given more weigh to in the growth of young people? I tend to give my support to cooperation.
First, through cooperation we can bring together the expertise, experience and creativity of more people and therefore achieving greater success. Modern society is operating in a more cooperative way, in which everyone is responsible for only a small fraction of the whole task and have rely on the power of others to realize the goal of the team. If we look at the organization of basically any company or government instituition, we can find there are people specialize in information system, data analysis, words processing, financial resource allocation and also management. Thus, it is necessary to prepare young people with the skills of cooperation so that they can become successful leaders to perform in a complicated organization composed of people with different background.
However, some may dispute my views, drawing attention to the frastrating fact that we are actually faced with more intense competition than ever before. They argue that it is irresponsible not to instill our young generation with a notion of competition before throwing them into a wild jungle where they won't fit in well and can not survive. Consistent this argument may seem with the reality, I have to point out that competition has undoubtedly always been part of our human society but it is also important how we trackle with it.
More often than not, competition does not mean that only one side wins and takes away all of the rewards. Instead, it means the parties in the competition has different interest but they finally arrive at a compromise to make everyone feel comfortable. For example, countries in the Europe used to compete with each other for critical resources and even broke into wars. When they realized that such competition is not actually good for anyone, they sat down to draw a plan towards the construction of the European Union. Does this cooperation mean that the countries give away all of their differences and do not compete with each other anymore? Probably not. But does this cooperation benefit all of the countries? Definitely yes. And this is only one example in how cooperation has more benefits than competition in almost all kinds of relationship.
In conlusion, both cooperation and competition exists in our society and I believe for the better development of future leaders, we should put more focus on cooperation rather than competition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 36.0 12.9106741573 279% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2434.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 476.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11344537815 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96906644486 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523109243697 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 783.0 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4735211425 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.7 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168833734425 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446268605253 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522746685704 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988839428508 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423318207582 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.