The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The common attributes of a successful leader are determination, dedication towards society, and decision-making skills. Also, there are two most important factors that a leader must possess are cooperation and competition. In my opinion, for the betterment of the people, it is utmost of importance to instill a sense of cooperation in the youth of our nations. I will discuss two reasons to support my belief in the following essay.
To begin, Competition is something that is inherited in young people from the very beginning of their childhood. It is difficult to nurture the competition aspect in children by teaching methodologies. For instance, when a child is encouraged to compete with his peers, it might develop the thought in a child that competition is the only possible thing to gain respect, praise, and money in their life. It is also possible that children may find it difficult to adjust to the social group of people because they feel inferior to others. Just because they were not able to perform better than another child, a child not only gets disappointed but further can get depressed, and he may quit after trying once. Thus, it is necessary to establish a sense of cooperation in young children in order for them to flourish in their desired fields without making them feel weaker than others.
Secondly, Cooperation can build a healthy environment for the young generation to achieve their goals. Nowadays, society requires most people to have great knowledge of the specific area because one person can not fulfill the requirements of the product that they want to build. For example, the people at NASA work together to achieve the collective goal of launching spaceships in space. For example, if we did not have encouraged youth to work together and share their respective knowledge to reach the final goal, then an organization like NASA would never have come into the picture and we could never have dreamt about space travel and its possibility either. Moreover, it is integral to introduce cooperation in our children because an individual can give his input in the form of an idea but to accomplish this idea cooperation from the team is vital.
To sum up, some people believe that only competition is necessary for achieving goals, but I argue that it is a secondary factor. In order to achieve success, it is integral to instill a sense of cooperation in our children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, for example, for instance, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2011.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97772277228 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84496620586 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519801980198 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3354147618 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.294117647 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7647058824 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17647058824 5.21951772744 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181360916585 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605523263003 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458060701618 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110937201715 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0176630714625 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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