The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The author claims that the optimal way to prepare young people for leadership is by promoting the sense of cooperation in them, not competition. I agree to the prompt for the most part as the most important quality in a leader is to encourage their counterparts as well as subordinates for growing together in a commensurate way. However, I believe a sense of healthy competition in any field can boost the effectiveness of the people and the sector as a whole.
To begin, I fully concede to the part that instilling the sense of cooperation in the youths can make them a better leader in any fields. In the ever-growing world, progess can be seen in every sectors. Every sector has a leading figure whose objective is to obtain best for his company, or in the case of government, his country. Hence, the race is never going to cease and there is only a limit one can achieve by competiting with each other. So, the best way can now only be cooperating with the "rivals" and growing together. To give an instance, Pathao Nepal started food delivery recently. There were already other established logistics such as Foodmandu and Bhoj providing exceptional service, the chance of Pathao to come to the top by competition was minimal. However, the three rival companies decide to promote one another in their events and now all three are thriving equally. Many such examples exist in the leading governments of the world as well who are all working together and developing. So, if the young people are provided the idea of cooperation from early age, or even when they are adult, then they can definitely improve the quality of leadership.
Moreover, agressive competition among the parties can elicit hatred towards one another and the growth of both person could be halted. As an instance, the competition between India and Pakistan to grow as the most powerful between two has become so high that terror attacks between those countries have started blaming each other. Even in the field of sports and journalism the competition has run riot and both the countries are not able to achieve much properly. So, encouraging cooperation instead of such radical competition can surely help to built better leaders.
However, it is not always the case that improvement with only occur by cooperation and eliminating competition can help them progress further. Healthy competition in every sector is always beneficial. A child, if does not have anyone to compete in school will grow complacent. Any industry in the world, if does not have any rival to match their product will start monopoly in the business. If we take the instance of the government, the long living competition between USA and Russia to become the most powerful nation has provided us with latest inventions, technologies and unimaginable feat from both the nations. If the competition is cordial, without any feeling of hostility and aversion, and is just for growing, then such relation is always necessary as the characteristic of the future leaders and we should move towards providing such notions to the youths.
To sum it up, the author's intention to fill young people with cooperation to make them better leader is totally justified. However, if friendly competition as a feeling to thrive in the world is not instilled in the youths, then they could hinder their own progress towards success. Hence, balance in both is necessary.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a commensurate way" with adverb for "commensurate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Line 7, column 537, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the latest'.
Suggestion: with the latest
...he most powerful nation has provided us with latest inventions, technologies and unimaginab...
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Line 9, column 19, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, moreover, so, still, then, well, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2849.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 572.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98076923077 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82463114879 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468531468531 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 901.8 704.065955056 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4838596601 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.576923077 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76923076923 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201738115464 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549000888138 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592763984874 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128186344062 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0791448827449 0.0667264976115 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 100.480337079 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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