The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Undoubtedly, young people should be prepared before entering the society and the job market. Therefore, it's correct that the best way for preparing youth is to instill in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
First of all, we are living in the heyday of technology which requires every individual to work well within a team. In fact, most tasks are done by effective teamwork, and hardly ever you can find a job that does not require a sense of cooperation. For example, auditing firms divide their employees to several groups, and each one has a leader. Accountants should work in these groups, share their works and communicate well with each other. Another example that need teamwork is programming. Tech-companies such as Apple, assign tasks to their group of programmers consists of several Software Engineers whose should cooperate within their group and reach an effective outcome. There are numerous instances of jobs that needs a great teamwork. Therefore, educational institutions should prepare the youth to have the ability of working effectively in a group and cooperate well with others.
Moreover, leadership needs some skills that people should learn, and the best way of achieving these skills is by working with others. Communicating effectively, having a positive attitude, and respecting others, especially, who has opposite viewpoint are the skills that should be learned with cooperating with others. Consider a person who works solely, so he does not have a chance of communicating with others, and encountering an opposite view. In this case, he does not learn how to tolerate disagreements and he cannot respect them. Being in a group is the best way than he can learn these skills.
Some might argue that competition is also necessary for young people because makes them more motivated. This idea has some merit on the surface. However, a wrong competition has more disadvantages than advantages. It could cause anxiety and depression if the individual competes in a wrong way with others. The best way of competition is that each person competes with himself. Everyone should try to be a best version of himself. In this case, he can advance and improve his failures. If every members of a society put their effort in making themselves a better person, the well-being of that society is guaranteed.
In conclusion, because of living in the modern world that requires everyone to work within the groups, it's necessary that young people be prepared for working with others and have a sense of cooperation. Therefore, society should make them ready by instilling the sense of cooperation. Also, the best kind of competition is that every person competes with himself instead of others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the
...with himself. Everyone should try to be a best version of himself. In this case, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2282.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 443.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15124153499 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84182956767 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469525959368 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 703.8 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.5207398055 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7692307692 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0384615385 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.03846153846 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209415342096 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060201650042 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629154935773 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150274464083 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0811255327364 0.0667264976115 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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